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A dream of the prophet
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A dream of the prophet |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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"I am not the one you know but the one you seek" said the prophet her hair black in flowing braids to knees smelling of snuff, buckskin, and lilacs "The one you seek has no face you know so I wear the one the face you do know as a dream of snow reveals you've kicked the blanket from your bed." Dream sun squinting eyes she turned ancient faced bronzed and creased into subtle smile and folded hands callused across her lap "Listen ;" The secret of Power: "The river is mighty because the stream hears the mountain's will and knows the sea is thirsty The ocean is vast for it drinks from every river large and small from every stream old and new The wind is strong when it accepts the sun --the sun that birthed every lust under heaven-- and returns the rivers' tears to the mountain The mountain rises to take the rain from the sky because it knows it is weary to carry it so far And the desert is dry because it will not stand up to the wind. When you understand this you will understand power when you understand power you will know love and when you know love you will have wisdom" These were the secrets the prophet spoke Hate is a dead thing. Who of you would be a tomb? -Kahlil Gibran |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wow! Rebel---this is amazing! Great imagery and powerful message... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
OH MAN... this is the COOLEST POEM!!!!! it is SO AWESOME... the imagery the wisdom the grace of it.. ALL of it...every line and the "secret of the power" is amazing writing simply superb work here why isn't this beauty marked for book submit... this one goes in my file thank you jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
ummm.... Wow!!! this is awesome.... LR- as always, you have a way of weaving truth through choice words which sing together in a most vivid intricacy.... could you tell i LIKE it? i need to read this one through several times... i could use a little power & wisdom *smile* Whatever you do, don't bring Yoko to band practice. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Local Rebel ~ I like how you've employed the image of the prophet to express the power of and reverence toward Nature. Lovely. Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
You blow me away with this one!!!!!! Excellent writing!! Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This is Awesome work!!! The weave of this tale was a work of art!! Great writing~ |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
Ominous. almost biblical. Great tone. Opinions are like bellybuttons: eveybody's got 'em and they're good for nothing. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Many thanks to each of you for the read and kind comments. This is somewhat a departure from my previous styles and I wasn't really sure how it would be to write it or read it. Thanks again |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
lol was just gonna comment on your diversity, this is different for you, but I love it...its got an acceptance in it...not sure how to say that, but reading it makes you feel at peace.....nice work  |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
ah... yes peace.... the final quatrain... but I didn't write that one.. nice that you picked up on it Corazon... thanks |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
WOW, a stunning piece. excellently written < !signature--> the plot of our life sweats in the dark like a face the mystery of childbirth, of childhood itself grave visitations what is it that calls to us?" patti smith [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 07-19-2000).] |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
It's good to read you again sweetheart... HUSG |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Cindy!!!!! Hey you!! Thanks.... nice to be read....  Thanks also to you Brian... |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
yep printed this, and read again yesterday before I left...love this, the thoughts the images leave you with are incredible... the ocean... the wind... the mountains... the desert... the power... only one thing left to say WOW! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Shall we catch up? Around 6pm my time tomorrow evening? HUSG |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Rebel~ This is an inticately awesome piece of work. It would seem that an ancient one has visited within you. I am cherishing these thoughts. PLEASE consider SUBMITTING it for the BOOK. How one might ask ?... well you just click on your EDIT icon ... and right below your User Name and Password is a box that says - says ... Would you like to have this poem considered for submission to the BOOK ? Just check it and submit ! We can vote on it ! It certainly would make a nice presentation of your work to be considered for the Voices on the Web book. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Thanks Marge and Corazon... I will consider... I promise. Cindy... mail me..! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Yes Sir, just did Sir... HUSG |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Holy crow, that was fantastic! Some sort of divine intervention on this one? I am simply amazed by the description of life's cycle. You couldn't have found better wording or better images. Excellent! |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
LR I have missed seeing your work around! Oh but ahhh, to read it again is delightful. Although this seems a departure from your 'usual' style, it is no less enjoyed...rather, enjoyed that much more. N. |
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