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Alone Within Myself
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Alone Within Myself |
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Impassionata Junior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 26Alberta,Canada |
An eternity of time no reason, no rhyme Endless days and nights no hope in sight alone within myself My heart as hard as rock My mind would mock build those walls don't listen to the calls alone within myself Then one day I heard him softly say unlock the door let your heart soar alone within myself The voice so soft coming from high aloft the rock that was my heart gave a start alone within myself My soul inside seemed to cry out you are strong you can cope there is hope alone within myself Draw deeply, from your inner beauty you have so much to give and know how to live alone within myself Then I understood I knew that I could love with passion deep never again to be alone within myself |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Impassionata beautiful use of the repeating phrase ... nice work ... |
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Impassionata Junior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 26Alberta,Canada |
Thank you MA for reading my poem...I know absolutly nothing about required elements of poetry..I can only say I write what my heart feels...Thank you again for you kind words |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
i don't either ... i write the same way ... i'll just assume that by calling it the "repeating phrase", you knew what i was referring to ... someone responded to one of my pieces a couple of days ago and suggested that i use a "sestina" approach to the piece ... i still don't know what that is, except it has something to do with 6's? My calling before me, let quill be my offering; For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive. M.A.M. |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~I love this...Writting from the heart is always the best way and you have done it beautifully..Great Job~ |
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Impassionata Junior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 26Alberta,Canada |
he he he...yes MA I did understand what you meant by "repeating phrase"..lol...I guess this is the site at which we can learn...and I am eager to learn lots and lots...alas I don't have much time to spend here. |
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Impassionata Junior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 26Alberta,Canada |
Thank you so much Beth....this means alot to me. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Impassionata~ Welcome to Passion's group of friends and poets. I enjoyed this piece - It is promising of uplifting hope and that is always a good thing. I like the idea of 'breaking free' to discover how we can fly from within the confines of ourselves. Enjoy your stay with us. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Impassionata Junior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 26Alberta,Canada |
Thank you Marge for reading my poem....I wrote this a few years ago when I was suffering from many tragic losses and I finally started to see the light at the end of the tunnel.....Thank you for your kind words |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is very beautiful, Impassionata and full of wisdom! Denise |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
WOW.....this is like a mirror of my soul, our circumstances may be totally different but from where I'm reading this hits my heart like a brick. You captured the feelings so well and lit the tunnel at the end with the rays of hope~ Beautiful work! |
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Impassionata Junior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 26Alberta,Canada |
Denise....Thank you so much for your kind words...I don't know if there is much wisdom in my poem but it reflects what had to change in my life to make me understand how beautiful life can be...Thanks again Butterflies...Your comment means alot to me because it lets me know that I am not alone withing myself.  |
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