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Someone here may care for me for Roisin.
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Someone here may care for me for Roisin. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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Someone here may care for me, Clutching straws, emblems of love, in gentile grace, I am complete in the raptures of your sanctuary. The ravens stalk the jagged edge of misery As the sun dies in voids of glacial lace, Someone here may care for me. Monuments of your solicitude linger eternally, Deeply rooted in my fabric love's tender trace, I am complete in the raptures of your sanctuary. A year of your absence seems an eternity, your spirit in comfort haunts my vacant place, Someone here may care for me. Your letters angelically soothe the howl of lonely. One song even harks your return, again finally face to face. I am complete in the raptures of your sanctuary. A path of rose petals will guide you into unity, Where I will hold you in our sacred space Someone here may care for me, I am complete in the raptures of your sanctuary. ========================= This poem is dedicated to my soul mate Roisin who I found out is returning home for a month after been away for a year in Australia. It is based on the style of the Dylan Thomas poem," Do not go gentle into that good night. "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else" faster-Manic street preachers. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Monuments of your solicitude linger eternally, Deeply rooted in my fabric love's tender trace, I am complete in the raptures of your sanctuary. A year of your absence seems an eternity, your spirit in comfort haunts my vacant place, Someone here may care for me. Your letters angelically soothe the howl of lonely. One song even harks your return, again finally face to face. I am complete in the raptures of your sanctuary. A path of rose petals will guide you into unity, Where I will hold you in our sacred space Someone here may care for me, I am complete in the raptures of your sanctuary. --------------------- YES!! i have been waiting to see this one come to life.... she inspires great things in you my friend... and is poetically perfect that you would have those petals in a poem for her  excellent Bri... I cant wait to see what her visit inspires in you... its gonna be Celestial me thinks... the stuff cherubs and butterflies are made of *wink wink* thank you for your awesome reply to my new poem... later-petals-gator jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent writing, Brian. Yes, it is an excellent villanelle done in a grand style. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Brian, I hope it all comes true. enjoyed the read. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BrianM~ A truly lovely piece. Those of us here care very much for your talent that simply shines with a glow of it's own. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Jan, yes she is quiet an inspiration. Yes I am now keeping the petals for special occasions. I am sure that the butterflies will soar on her arrival. Thank you for your wonderful response. Balladeer, thank you for your wonderful response. I only hope I have done Mr. Dylan THomas justice. Seymour, I have every faith it will. Her return will fill the void of loneliness, I only wish that she could stay longer. Thank you for your lovely reply. Marge, thank you for your beautiful words and for your continued support. God Bless. "Out of sorrow entire worlds have been built Out of longing great wonders have been willed They're only little tears, darling, let them spill" Nick |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Brian, This poem is beautiful, I can tell you will be in delight with her presense. You did a fabulous job writing this, I like it  |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
LD thank your for your wonderful comments. "Out of sorrow entire worlds have been built Out of longing great wonders have been willed They're only little tears, darling, let them spill" Nick |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent writing, as always, Brian! Denise |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Denise, thank you for your beautiful words. "Out of sorrow entire worlds have been built Out of longing great wonders have been willed They're only little tears, darling, let them spill" Nick |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
I loved it.....couldn't say it any betterthan anyone else!!! Very well done! Julie :) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Brian--I love the form and feel of this..so beautifully done! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
JulieAnn, thanks for your wonderful words. Martie, thanks for your wonderful response, I thought I would experiment and try new styles. I am really glad that you enjoyed the style. why must we pray screaming? why must not death be redefined? we shut our eyes we stretch out our arms and whirl on a pane of glass-patti smith |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Beautiful and heart warming, brian...serenity does her happy screen dance for the two of you... |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
extremely well done with a difficult rhyming pattern ... love it, Brian ... hope your reunion goes well ... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Brian I hope everthing goes well. Tremendous style in this poem, different and so well done.....take care.....ethome.... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Brian* This is indeed beautiful and beyond, so tender...it floated across the page...like butterfly wings~ |
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