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She's coming tonight! She's coming tonight!
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She's coming tonight! She's coming tonight! |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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She's coming tonight! She's coming tonight! I can't believe it's true! I'm acting like a nervous wreck... I don't know what to do! I took two showers and ate three rolls Of Clorets for my breath. She's coming tonight! She's coming tonight! My God! I'm scared to death! I watched her for so very long.. Stayed just a step behind. She's never known the love or passion Living in my mind. I've always been her special friend In whom she could confide. But never had the strength to show her How I feel inside. The table's set...the china's placed, The tablecloth is clean. The dirty clothes are underneath The bed to be unseen. The furniture's been dusted and I vacuumed every rug... She's coming tonight! She's coming tonight! Dear Lord, I need a drug! Last week I finally got the nerve To ask her for a date. I knew that she would turn me down But she said that was great! I tried to make it nonchalant To not scare her away. I couldn't let her know how much I've daydreamed of this day. Sinatra's on the cd player... Candles are aglow. Three days I've worked my tail off To make it all just so. The food's cooked to perfection And the wine is nicely chilled... She's coming tonight! She's coming tonight! I'm going to get killed!!! For weeks I've watched the calendar, Marked days off one by one. There's no way I can get through this... My Lord, what have I done? She's such a queen - I worship her I'm just a simple guy And everyone's in love with her But not as much as I. The toilet seats are down, I hope. There's no hair in the sink. I cleaned the ring around the tub... Soap dish ok, I think. All burned-out bulbs have been replaced, The ashtrays free of butts... She's coming tonight! She's coming tonight! And I am going nuts!!! How could I have been so dumb? What was I thinking of? I'm not schooled in those subtle things One needs for showing love. I can't say how much that I care 'Cause that might make her go But if I act too casual Then how is she to know? Will she be wise enough to look Past all my frailties To see the man inside of me Who only wants to please? Or will she think I'm just a guy Who's trying to be nice? She's coming tonight! She's coming tonight! Dear Abby.....send advice!!! Then, when it's time for her to go, I'll gently squeeze her hand And, if she doesn't squeeze mine back, I'll try to understand. She'll never know my heart is broken. I will just pretend That I'm completely satisfied In being her good friend. Oh, no! The hour is getting late! I'd best do something quick! It might be good to call her up And tell her I got sick! There's no way I can make it through... I'm shivering with fear! She's coming tonight! She's coming tonight! Oh, no! The bell! She's here!!!!!  [This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 07-15-2000).] |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is absolutely marvelous! A touch of humor, some reality and a bit of poetic longing..excellent!  |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
hehe. Thank you, deVine one. This one was fun. There are many people out there who just get completely befuddled trying to relate to members of the opposite sex. Of course, I drew on my own shyness and insecurities to create this poem  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, I agree with Poet deVine but then I've never seen you write a bad one. Great. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Aftermath, please? Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
I loved it, no question, perfection.  |
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MagnoliaBlue Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 367 |
This is wonderful. So sweet and romantic! Great writing ,as always! I just love it!  MagnoliaBlue ~My Skipper Jim I love you! Your Lady June~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and she's the lucky one to be there too... you rock again my friend ... you didnt have to clean the house... all ya have to do is write her a poem.. how could she resist later-love-gator jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ You just make it look sooooooo easy ... and sooooooo much FUN !  Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Balladeer can totally relate, I am grand in platonic mood but when things get beyond that well.... ARRRRAGGGGGGGGhhhhh lol a wonderful poem my friend. Hope it all went well. "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else" faster-Manic street preachers. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Michael, Oh my God!!! Frank Sinatra on the CD player and the toilet seats down. Cold wine and clean ashtrays, what woman could ask for anything more? Tuck the napkin under my chin and serve me, I'm starving. I loved this. Kathleen |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Another masterpiece Balladeer |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Yeah, but did you iron the cloth napkins? LOL Michael, I enjoyed this poem very much.... sounds exciting!!! As usual, you have penned a verse which keeps the reader in suspnse and at the same time, is filled with honesty and a view of life from the inside of a very remarkable person. Thanks for a wonderful read. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Balladeer, LOL....this was a great and funny poem. I really enjoyed it. I hope you made it through and impressed her!!! LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Can...can it be true??? IS MY PRIVATE JET FINALLY HERE????? After nearly a whole year...has the 'deer bucked up the courage to send it over? And yanno dear 'deer - having them toilet seats down is a good thing...but do you have the toilet paper round the right way? (Now we all remember that 'debate' don't we?) Hehehe.... She'll be coming round the world when she comes... LOL - good stuff 'deer... The S O |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is absolutely delightful, Balladeer! You've caputured well those insecurities at the beginning (or possible beginning) of a relationship. Very well written, of course! I, too, have never seen a bad one from you! Denise |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sy..your approval always makes me smile. Thank you Sunshine....She came Marsha...Thank you for such a nice compliment. I appreciate it.... Magnolia..and I love that you love it Thank you...JanetMarie....how could she resist? The sam way all the others did!!! Thank you, my friend.Marge....It ain't easy but it sure is fun....as you well know!!! Brian...with the lover reputation Irishmen have? How can this be? (believe me, I know what you mean)IrishRose....amazing how you picked out all the important parts!!!Get ready to be served Jeffrey... I thank you very much, good sir. Doreen...they make cloth napkins? Without MacDonald logos? I had no idea! Thank you!!! LoneWolf...you know how it is...impress one - depress another Thanks for reading...Severny one...Darn! I forgot about the roll!! I'm really sorry but, with jet fuel prices the way they are, I just can't afford you! Keep the faith-I'm saving as fast as I can!!!!Denise....and I'm delighted that you are! Oh, I have plenty of bad ones - I just try to keep them out of sight! Thank you for being such a friend |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
She's probably more nervous than you are ... and brought her best girlfriend with her ... hope you don't mind ? this is a real gem |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
All the delicacies of the material world, pale in colour and fade in taste, offering meek challenge to the superb "art-form" that some deem to call as poetry... Balladeer, you are in fact a master in this field... your way with words, and putting thoughts in a most wondrous way is astounding and what more, you make it all appear so easy and with much elan... This is just another gem, one of the very few in millions... a testament of your abilities... Gosh, I am lucky being a worshipper of such an art... regards, sudhir [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 07-16-2000).] |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Oh, Sir another masterpiece from your precious mind. Made me laugh to think of all the preparation and nervousness you were potraying, when if I were the one arrivng, I would be going crazy wondering if I looked my best. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I'm glad to see she came, Balladeer! Now...how did the evening go? You may have to write another poem to fill us in! Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Tastefully seasoned with old fashioned romance and humour. Very enjoyable uplifitng read. Brought out the old schoolboy in me, as Valdy would say, "when I acted as proud as a fool." Great work! |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
I've read an eight line poem that seemed to take longer than yours! Smiled the whole way through, nodding in agreement. Fantastic, Balladeer! |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
I most certainly enjoyed this! Please tell us who the lucky girl is!! and did she "squeeze back?" (smile) |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Very tightly written, deer one, now, how about the sequel, eh? We all want to know what happened next! Corinne |
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deb Junior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 44Reading, Pa., USA |
Incredibly entertaining  ) I enjoyed the read!ded |
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Michael G Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579Nashville |
Yes we do want to know what happend, PLEASE. Very well written |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Well done, deer---how do you do that...where do you come up with all those stories and then to write with such mastery...you are just amazing! |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
great poem, wanted to read last week and didn't have time, glad i got to today, but??? shy and insecure????? rofg great work mr. balladeer |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
This made me imagine you making sure everything was just right...and everything...made me laugh....quite another treasure here, 'Deer!! Loved it!!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Gossamerwings Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 207 |
LOL. Nervous anticipation. Well done,Sir! Gossamerwings ;) |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
I've been away a little while Balladeer, and the first place I went was straight to your stuff. I'm an avid follower of your poems. You captured the antipation of the evening to perfection. Linda M. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I'm just a'smiling away here! You know, I get so wrapped up in your poems as I'm reading Balladeer ... I think a bomb could go off, and I'd never notice it! Excellent writing ... I smiled all the way through ... loved it! Still smiling Best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 07-18-2000).] |
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