Open Poetry #8 |
The Knight's Lament. . . |
Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Gentle maiden, why dost thou resist my words? Cans't thou see that I am at a loss? I long to hear thy voice again sweetest that I have ever heard And to gaze ino thine eyes again no matter what the cost Long has the battle raged in mine heart Yea, I am weary and the battle grows long But in thy gentle arms of love I find new strength to start Thy heart sings to me a gentle tune giving my heart they heart's song So gentle maiden, please do not my heart spurn Take my heart and please hold it dear Since thou hast left, for thee have I longed for thee my heart does yearn Without thee, my arms are truly empty and greater grows the fear ------------------------------------------------------------- |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Oh My! I felt so much reading that one. Makes me want to hug ya. Sauni |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
this is so sweet and vulnerable Sven---hugs to you...onward trudge, oh brave Knight. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Remove thy gloves, oh tender Knight repose against thy hip and in my hands your heart I'll care while you taste my lips... do not think of battle, nay, do not think of war but only think in my heart to lay, and be pleased of where you are... Sven, you do some good stuff...and this is it, right here... [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 07-14-2000).] |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Sir Sven, bravest of Knights, this a very exception piece of writing my friend. I believe you have out done yourself with this one. Every Maiden from far and wide shall beckon for your affections after reading this one. They shall all long to place themselves within your heart and erase all memories of another. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Sven ... I wouldn't even know where to begin ... outstanding ... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Okay Sir Sven, I agree you are the best, and most kind hearted gentleman I have ever come across... maybe you are the Chosen One.... atleast the best "wooer" (is that a correct word, I wonder?) in down town passion-town!!! wonderful lingeringly romantic touch to the poem... regards, sudhir. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Back to the top! It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Thanks to all. . . Saunni, thank you and I'll always take a hug!! serenity, thank you my friend, the battle rages on. . . Sunshine, wow. . . thank you for your verse, it's beautiful. . . and I am glad that you liked mine. . . Marina, ok. . . just what have you been drinking? LOL I'm glad that you liked my poem (twice!). . . but I don't know that my door will be beaten down! Thank you though my friend. . . MA, thank you so much. . . Sudhir, my friend. . . I am FAR from being the Chosen One. . . and I don't know if "wooer" is a word, but I'll take it!! ------------------------------------------------------- < !signature--> That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 07-15-2000).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Sven..... a fair maiden in distress would be most lucky to have a knight such as you ride to the rescue. this was another magnificent piece. I must admit, I've become a collector of your fine work. Keep writing!!!! [This message has been edited by Sunny1 (edited 07-15-2000).] |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sven, Nice writing here my friend. Very tender plea. I just love knights and days of olde. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"Without thee, my arms are truly empty, and so grows my fear." I know what you are saying Sven..I feel the same way right now waiting for my fair maiden to come into my arms. James |
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