Open Poetry #8 |
Sunlight |
Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Through the clouds sunlight shines It illuminates the sky in golden lines Warmth is spread thoughout the land Inner peace is at last at hand Times of conflict are now over In the grass there's a four leaf clover I can feel the heat of the sun Its intensity is second to none In the air is the scent of flowers You can smell them from the highest towers Their colors are a sight to behold Deep red, blue, pink, purple, and gold The wind causes the leaves to dance One breaks off and gets its chance To live apart from the oak tree Fly away from here and be free The sun's yellow turns to pink As it begins to slowly sink Then it has an orange glow Reaching the horizon it slips below Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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MagnoliaBlue Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 367 |
Very pretty poem! I love the way you have expressed this! MagnoliaBlue ~My Skipper Jim I love you! Your Lady June~ |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Wow! So great!! I love poems about nature....Such a good poem. Sauni |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Nothing like a sunny filled day. I liked this. |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
"The wind causes the leaves to dance One breaks off and gets its chance To live apart from the oak tree Fly away from here and be free" --------------------------------- Beautiful..and if i were that little leaf i would want to break free and float on the sunshine warm wind on this beautiful day youve just lovingly described.. Your poem was breathtaking! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
If you are going to listen to the wind then that sounds like the place to do it. This was a wonderful read at this hour (any hour actually)and your vision is once again lent over to me. Thank you for the read |
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Bustem57 Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 98 |
Reminds me of back home!!! Well written!! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoneWolf~ I'm simply blown away at the vividity of the colors in this lovely piece. Iffen you don't mind - I'm gonna think of it as one of your best ! What a full palette of beautiful colors. May the sunlight kiss your face with a smile, as you have surely placed a smile on mine. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Well written!!!!!!! Keep it up!!!!!!! |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Ahh, see? There, you've gone and done it again. Take me to an autumn meadow and I see your poem all around me. Wonderful visuals created by this one! I can almost smell the cooling breeze as the sun sets! *sigh* |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ah!!! Sheer beauty... Dark Angel.... this was pure supernatural beauty here... enjoyed it thoroughly regards, sudhir |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"The taxman's taken all my dough and left me with no place to go all I got's this sunny afternoon." But hey sunny afternoon's ain't so bad... you have described it all so peacefully and relaxing...James |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
BEAUTIFUL LW!!!!!!!! your just finding inspiration everywhere you look... perfect imagery !! wonderful writing girl way cool later-sunshine in my day-gator jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
MB . . . Thank you very much!! Saunni . . . Me too!! Thanks!! kitkat . . . Happy to hear that. Yes, those days are the best. Poutprincess . . . I am with you!!! Oh to be the leaf. Thanks for the lovely comments. Mark . . . You're welcome. Thank you for reading. Busten57 . . . Can I come to your house?? LOL. Thanks. Marge . . . Awe, I blew you away?? now that's a switch!! LOL. I do not mind at all, I have to agree with you. Thanks so much. I hope the sunlight kises your face also my friend. Vandana . . . Thanks. Trew . . . Thanks, I try. *sigh* I can smell the breeze too. What a lovely scent. Sudhir . . . I am Lone Wolf, but thanks anyway!! LOL James . . . No money required!! JM . . . Inspiration comes in the strangest places sometimes. Thank you very much for the compliments. I thik the sunshine should be shared.......always. Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Awwwww what a a mess, this is what I get for having multiple windows open... I messed up the name... I am so sorry for that... this was pure circumstantial... I hope you'd forgive me... but my comments still hold true of course... I am like all pale with embarrassment, Lone Wolf... regards, sudhir |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh, I like this very, very much! Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Mind if I stand here under the rays of your sunlight for a moment This is beautiful L.W. such hope and grace within this piece~ |
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