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Pulse" (a sonnet )
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Pulse" (a sonnet ) |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Pulse Swift thoughts be still intrude not on this morn dead calm has settled full on virgin day A voice infused soft murmurs being born to cleanse this heart of all that which it may The aging tired cells of past regrets now bathed in pure liquid tranquility Are silent for a time that's not been set suspended in fluid reality A cadence brief it's echo innocent the breath of life distilled can now be heard Above the din contained by moments spent too long a fool ignores unspoken words This pulse is all that's left of it's domain the more so precious sweet sounds it's refrain |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The pulse thereby leading to the beat of your heart... So good! Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
beautifully written Doctor. wonderful poem. The aging tired cells of past regrets now bathed in pure liquid tranquility Are silent for a time that's not been set suspended in fluid reality A cadence brief it's echo innocent the breath of life distilled can now be heard "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else" faster-Manic street preachers. |
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Michael G Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579Nashville |
Very well done!! I love sonnets, need to see more of them. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Sunshine, Exactamundo ! I sometimes wonder if Shakespear was a morning person ? Brian, Thank you for your kind words . Though inspired by the morning's solitude , this reflects a day's re-writing . I'm most appreciative of your comments . Michael G , You should have seen some of my first attempts ! For a while it seemed that this form was going to get the best of me .As Sunshine said " back to the heart " Doc |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I loved this sonnet and the tempo was perfect. Looking forward to more. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DrMoose~ This is just so very pretty. 'This pulse is all that's left of it's domain the more so precious sweet sounds it's refrain' Wonderful phrasing. Enjoyed it so much. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Mark , Thanks for the R&R Marge , Your words are an inspiration unto themselves Thanks , Doc |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Doc, you're gonna get kicked out of the stute for sure....this is too excellent  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Nothing could get the best of you, Dr.Moose! This is so lovely!  Denise |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Balladeer , Well it isn't anything a few more rounds of the old electro-shock won't cure , but thanks for being concerned , and the R&R ! d, Not too sure about that , just waiting to see what Nan comes up with in the old workshop . Thanks Doc |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Dr.Moose1, Never read such a beautiful description of a biological function (turned passionate) ... Love this format and you do it quite well ... Thanks. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
this was beautifully written very well done!! Kathleen |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
MA Miller , There seem to be very few moments , as busy as we all are , to set aside all the distractions and just really listen , and appreciate . Thanks for the R&R . Irish Rose, The cadence of the heart just seemed to slip perfectly into the meter of the sonnet once it was quiet .Thank you for your comments . Doc |
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