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Martie
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0 posted 2000-07-13 12:32 PM



(from the archieves)

Her Twisted Silky Threads

Love is such folly voice,
singing tangled bars that
drain rhythm’s sweet tempestuous storm,
like a heart song given
across parched perception
that changes true to need.

Love gladly touches whispers
in glade’s bend and bow,
rising to the redwood’s strength,
but such a height is dizzying
and falling  on tundra
that protests its very loveliness
seems more safe.

Why is a heart so careful it
careens, falling as it stands
next to tattered need
expecting Suresh from languid sand
that holds no echo but gives into itself?

She would gladly open,
show her twisted silky threads
to you of noble
and sweet vibrant core,
but listen, still the sound
is silent and withered,
has dwindled into stone
in cold and hardened lack,
to sit and gaze across the
meadow-land of earth and light,
for the song for want has ended,
waiting.



© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Mark Bohannan
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1 posted 2000-07-13 12:53 PM


This is one to cherish and so vivid in the visuals.  Great read my friend.
Sunnyone
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2 posted 2000-07-13 02:28 PM


Martie....

    This is beautiful and paints such a
             picture......
    It refers to the redwoods and the tundra
        and sand....all places that hold
        memories.......

             so, thank you.......


My heart is an open book
....take a look....


serenity blaze
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3 posted 2000-07-13 02:33 PM


This is so you...your poetry reads so easily and beautifully Martie...sort of like a "mind massage"...lol...alright, so that's not a pretty visual, but methinks you've used them all...
Janet Marie
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4 posted 2000-07-13 02:43 PM


Love gladly touches whispers
in glade’s bend and bow,
rising to the redwood’s strength,
but such a height is dizzying
and falling  on tundra
that protests its very loveliness
seems more safe.

Why is a heart so careful it
careens, falling as it stands
next to tattered need
expecting Suresh from languid sand
that holds no echo but gives into itself?
----------------
Like a breezy summers day swinging in a hammock in the shade...
thats how serene your poetry reads...
me eyes thank you  
someday Im gonna go walk barefoot in your
archives...
later-martie-gator
jm
  

There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~

Martie
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5 posted 2000-07-13 05:58 PM


Mark--What a great word, cherish, I am so pleased you used in reference to this poem.

Sunny--I'm glad I touched some of your memories with my words.

jm--walk barefoot in my archieves...I love it...now, that sounds like your muse talking.

Serenity--a mind message--what a wonderful way to describe it...I like it, I do!

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6 posted 2000-07-13 08:28 PM


Martie~
No words .....
but one great big smile !

Well, maybe two !
Love ya'
~*Marge*~



~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Denise
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7 posted 2000-07-13 09:40 PM


Silky smooth!  

Denise

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