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Adrienne
Junior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 20
California

0 posted 2000-07-12 08:15 PM

As I sit here with a thought of you
      There is nothing left for me to do
   Just close my eyes
     and let you invade my senses
         tear away at my defensive fences,
     to step away from what you stand for
        perhaps,
             some illusive, wavering door
        vibrating me to the very, vulnerable core.
    Sending shivers along the edges of my skin,
           like some unspeakable deed left for sin
    Yet,
         my mind keeps me standing steady
            for I know neither are we both ready,
       to reach up to a higher state of mind
             each afraid of outcomes we could find,
    in this deafening crowd of doubt so intense
             our bodies rigid in silent suspense,
           of that unknown boundary
                  we just might cross
        our precautions left to suffer its loss,
          Still I look at you,
              and know somewhere inside
               you hold back with fear to confide.
    In your eyes I slip into depths of sorrow
       where you are hiding until some other marrow,
   confused on life's never ending choices
         trying hard to ignore invading voices,
            searching for a place
                     to sit and ponder
         dwell in your emotions and silently wander,
  As to what can the next sunrise hold
           a sky full of warm light
                 or a gale full of cold.
      Nothing on our spinning axis
                     can intervene,
        on your decision to fall
                into that place so serene,
        where you awaken to the dawn of total bliss
      shining radiance giving you a lifelong kiss.
My consolation I give you is my listening ear
    and these arms that will hold you ever so near,
      Only,if you should need
                      that extra caring touch
             I am here to give you such.....

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2000-07-12 08:31 PM

Adrienne I am crazy about this poem...lovely flowing poetic beauty....James

Adrienne
Junior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 20
California

2 posted 2000-07-12 08:42 PM

James, to be my first reply, I have a feeling it will be something I'll always remember. Thanks for being quite so kind...

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-07-12 08:55 PM

As I sit here with a thought of you
      There is nothing left for me to do
   Just close my eyes
     and let you invade my senses
         tear away at my defensive fences,
     to step away from what you stand for
        perhaps,
             some illusive, wavering door
        vibrating me to the very, vulnerable core.
    Sending shivers along the edges of my skin,
           like some unspeakable deed left for sin
    Yet,
         my mind keeps me standing steady
            for I know neither are we both ready,
       to reach up to a higher state of mind
             each afraid of outcomes we could find,
    in this deafening crowd of doubt so intense
             our bodies rigid in silent suspense,
           of that unknown boundary
                  we just might cross
        our precautions left to suffer its loss,
--------------
this is VERY well written and thought
out..you have some amazing lines in this
and lots of depth of emotion
Welcome to passions
nice to meet you
take care
jm

I think I could need - this in my life
If you're gone - baby you need to come home
there's a little bit of something me
In everything in you
MB20

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

4 posted 2000-07-12 09:02 PM

Welcome to the family! I really liked this and look forward to reading more from you. Please check your email.

Butterflies_dont_cry
Member Elite

since 2000-03-06

Posts 3733
Michigan

5 posted 2000-07-12 10:05 PM

What a beautiful entrance you have made..Welcome to Passions!!

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

6 posted 2000-07-12 10:11 PM

Very pleasureable reading......Welcome!

EagleOne
Member Elite

since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

7 posted 2000-07-12 11:36 PM

A great work to mark your entrance, Welcome!

God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

8 posted 2000-07-13 02:46 AM

When we answered the door you really made quite an entrance. This is beautiful. Welcome to Passions and we await your next post.

tracie66
Member Elite

since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

9 posted 2000-07-13 04:53 AM

Adrienne~
Welcome to passions

This is so very beautiful and indeed a wonderful first post.
Love Tracie~

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

Rindercella
Member

since 1999-11-12

Posts 64
La La Land

10 posted 2000-07-15 08:05 AM

I enjoyed this poem very much.
When someone wanders through our thoughts it is a most pleasurable adventure.
You placed your emotions on the page very well.

*If the shoe fits ... the castle is yours*

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

11 posted 2000-07-15 09:58 AM

Welcome to Passions Adrienne! You've expressed yourself well in this lovely poem ... hope to read more from you!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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