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Zion
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since 2000-07-23
Posts 33
Melbourne Australia

0 posted 2000-07-28 11:23 AM


Many summers I have seen
Just as many winters there have been
So many Springs went by
Like leafs the Autumns fell

But I remember still the first time we met
I saw in your eyes lifes love
As from a mirror reflecting
Your simple beauty In my heart I happily hold
In your eyes I've seen the sunrise
The silver golden rays of dawn
Even in your eyes I've seen midnight's silver dew
sparkling oh so tenderly,

In your hair there be wild flowers with hues of blue and rose
In your laughter, I've seen green gardens, like no one's ever known

Your heart it holds the secrets of summer's first found breath
Your mind it shares the brilliance of a diamond's brilliance
Your soul, it shines bright white then glitters effervescent pink
I 've known heaven in a heartbeat, when thoughts of you I think
Your voice carries the magic of a rainbow's
sweet surprise gently caressing the horizon
To bring love and mystify


Our love, like starlight from the heavens from ages past
Eluding time, whirling through space
Past the moon,beyond the galaxies so far away
Yet right here I remember still
Emitted through our hearts.
Captured this moment
By the twinkle in your eye
Our love,
More brilliant than any supernova explosian
Burning in the Universe
Burning bright
Forever


I should have mentioned this before but I forgot
this Poem is Seeking Seeing rewrittenand renamed


[This message has been edited by Zion (edited 07-28-2000).]

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MMoonchild
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since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715
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1 posted 2000-07-28 11:57 AM


Your heart it holds the secrets of summer's first found breath
Your mind it shares the brilliance of a diamond's brilliance
Your soul, it shines bright white then glitters effervescent pink
I've known heaven in a heartbeat, when thoughts of you I think
Your voice carries the magic of a rainbow's
sweet surprise gently caressing the horizon
To bring love and mystify

these images are lovely, Zion

~~softly
Maureen

Xeonox
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since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764
CA, USA
2 posted 2000-07-28 11:58 AM


Can I say hot, on fire, awesome, just burning my heart? Great job!!!!    

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

Zion
Junior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 33
Melbourne Australia
3 posted 2000-07-28 02:19 PM


MMoonchild /Xeonox
thank you for your words of encourage ment
I didn't mean to decieve I simply forget to
mention it was rewritten and renamed
I was in a rush at the time
forgive me please

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
4 posted 2000-07-28 02:24 PM


Hot, Passionate, and superb imagery.  I do believe you have a keeper here.  Great work.
Keep it up.

MMoonchild
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since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715
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5 posted 2000-07-28 07:06 PM


oh nowwwww I understand what that email was about..gee I liked the poem no matter what the title..what more needs be said, Zion

oh yes  one thing needs be asked..are you having trouble posting anything new..I can't seem to except for replies...and I have rebooted etc..and emptied out temps, too.
~~softly sighing
Maureen

Marge Tindal
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6 posted 2000-07-28 10:56 PM


Zion~
This is a lovely piece.

'Many summers I have seen
Just as many winters there have been
So many Springs went by
Like leafs the Autumns fell'

Easy reading here.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
7 posted 2000-07-29 03:40 AM


Zion...so very lovely the images just flow across my mind...wonderful

never say never

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