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Behind the Picket Fence
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Behind the Picket Fence |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
.gif) Looking into the mirror she refuses to meet the stare Tending to the job at hand...conceal & cover with artistic flair As she attacks the feat at hand the memory plays again He was late, dinner cold...that’s all it takes to begin First the words flew like fiery knives into her heart Then when words weren’t enough the blows impart He used to be careful not to leave a trace But now he can't stand "that look" upon her face Snapped back to the present with the ringing of the bell Mentally she prepares another story she’ll tell Friends stop by to see how she is feeling since her “fall” She blinks back the tears and the shame of it all “How lucky you are to have such a sweet loving man” Choking on bile she says.... “Yes, I certainly am” Flowers arrive “To the woman who walks my dreams” Behind the picket fence life is never what it seems~ [This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 07-10-2000).] |
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Sky_Dancer Junior Member
since 2000-07-07
Posts 17 |
This poem is beautiful. It describes to me one of life's most painful experiences. My boyfriend's mother was abused by her ex husband, so this kinda hits home. This was beautifully done. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
A beautifully written, emotional, raw and bitter poem. I think of my Mother after reading this. No woman should have to live through this agony. Thank you for sharing this important poem on a very important issue, I only hope that everyone at passions gets the chance to read this! Any man who abuses his wife or child, really is a little boy, who is the true coward. It hurt for me to read this, but I'm glad that I did. Take care, Melissa Honeybee< !signature--> The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 07-10-2000).] |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
What a sad true vision of hurt that hides and grows...Very well done! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
no one deserves this kind pain none should ever know this kind of shame no one should tear the wings off butterflies open that jar ... (its time to fly)...you wont know unless you try. **************** when I dont know how to say what I feel I make up a verse or rhyme.... Its real easy to rhyme words It is not ever not easy to live them. love you take care me < !signature--> I think I could need - this in my life If you're gone - baby you need to come home there's a little bit of something me In everything in you MB20 [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 07-10-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Been there, done that. The best advice I can give to anyone living like this is to get out before the flowers are for a funeral. It's not easy to start over again, but it's easier than dying. I had to go 'underground' for two years with two kids. We survived and made a better life for ourselves. I hope this isn't about you Butterflies. If it is, get out now while you still can and don't look back. Denise |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I hope that is not personal experience. I have heard that most of the time there is no helping men who abuse women... the only choice is to get out... either way..hope the best for the person in the poem.. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
You make a powerful statement here Butterfly. As always written with such emotion and feeling. though I think you should have let everyone know that is not about you personally . < !signature--> God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown [This message has been edited by EagleOne (edited 07-10-2000).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Sky Dancer* Thank you so much for your heart felt response~ Melissa* After reading your newest post I understand how this would effect you, my hugs to you, thank you for reading~ Martie* It's a pleasure to hear from you, thank you~ Janet* No worries for me sweetie, thank you for your reply and your love...each is treasured~ Denise* This is a combination of my sister's story and my emotions right now, I've only been beaten with words..no bruises that show with those, My heartfelt apologies for the life that you have lived....no one should have to go through the steps that you had to take. ((hugs)) to you for your strength and your courage for doing what you had to for you and your children~ Jamie* Thank you for reading, and I echo your statements on this subject~ Eagle* My sincere aplogies for making you worry, this of course was not my intention. But you make me remember why I do love this place and the people......hearts of GOLD, thank you for your friendship and your comments~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
So glad I caught this one. It is a very powerful piece and should be viewed by everyone. I am so glad that this is not you and I shed a tear for all those stuck in this situation. I am adding this to my file. Thank you my friend for another lovely work. |
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Martini Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
Your ability to express so much through words leaves me speachless.... A wonderful poem about the hardships of some's lives. Wonderfully written |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Back to the top!! |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
A touching piece ... Agree with Mark B. ... Should be read by many ... Words cut deep as any blade ... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Mark* Thank you for the kindness of your reply...so many turn their backs and put their heads back into their own busy lives..(A.K.A. the sand) it's nice to see people who actually care about this..Thanks for the "bump" as well  Martini* Thank you very much, I appreciate you reading and your kind reply~ MA* Thank you so much...and welcome once again to Passions |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ButterfliesDC~ So sad a tale of reality. No matter who lives it ... it is escapable ... and abuse is abuse whether it's physical or verbal and we should develop a ZERO-tolerance level for it. Denise's advice should be heeded. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
BDC, Powerful words my friend. This seemed so real when I read it. I am very happy to hear it is not a true story for you. You had me worried there. It is sad that people have to come home and endure such a thing, but I am sure it happens to a lot of people. Take care!! ***HUGS*** LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Marge* I whole heartedly agree with you...I think that often we are mislead in the idea of the old "sticks and stones" bit...I've heard soooooooo many times "well it's not like you were beaten".....how wrong they are. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and reply. L.W.* Yes it is sad...Thank you much for being the caring person that you are...sorry for the scare my friend. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I came back to read this and decided it needed another trip through for you. It is such a beautifully sad work that I wanted to make sure it was viewed by more. Hope you don't mind. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
How sad, butterfly. Those white picket fences can hide an awful lot, can't they? Excellent writing!!! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Had to stop by and read this one you write Expression well done Butterfly! Coco |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Butterflies ... I "do" cry, when I read such heart-wrenching verses. With words or a fist, a hit makes it's mark as intended. Very poignant and raw emotions you've expressed so incredibly well ... it takes my breath away from me ... Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Mark* No I don't mind.....thank you so much. Balladeer* Picket fences......stone walls Mote sold seperately  When no one lookspast their own yard it's easy to hide. Thank you so much for reading~ CoCo* Thankyou as always you are very kind~ Kit* Thank you so much.....I'm sorry to cause you tears though..((Hugs)) |
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