»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #8
»
Dancing...... #1
| Open Poetry #8 |
|
Dancing...... #1 |
|
|
LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion 
|
She needs him and she wants him; she can have him now, But she waits demurely, as he wonders with furrowed brow, "Does this angel want me? Is this part of the dance?" She'd be his forever if he'd the courage to take the chance. He lifts his hand and brushes her hair off to one side, As if it were an auburn curtain framing her azure eyes. She lifts her gaze up to him, and lets her smile beguile The boy inside the man who's confused by selfdenial. A teasing dance begins at the corners of her mouth, As she tips her head coquettishly and lets her tongue dart out. The invitation's sent, but he fails to read the news, He simply gazes at her smile, doubting and confused. She begins to wonder if the years had dimmed the blush, From the bloom of her youth that had graced her with its touch. She's clearly announced to him that she awaits his arms, Her every message punctuated by her feminine charms. She's told him in so many ways, in the language of romance, That she is his to love and hold, if he'd join her in the dance. But dancing requires a partner who will step out on the floor, And lead with measured grace though he's never led before. Women are wonderful dancers, swaying in perfect time, While men are oft oblivious to the rhythm or the rhyme. Women dance with passion because courtship is their soul, While men stand by in muted awe of what they can't control. The music is unmistakable for those who pause to hear, But too often a lifetime love is lost from unacknowledged fears. For it isn't in the message, but the medium in which its sent, That the dance's invitation may miss the one for whom its meant. |
||
| © Copyright 2000 Michael Waterman - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I love it all - but especially the last line here, LJA...  |
||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
He lifts his hand and brushes her hair off to one side, As if it were an auburn curtain framing her azure eyes. She lifts her gaze up to him, and lets her smile beguile The boy inside the man who's confused by selfdenial. ---------------- She's told him in so many ways, in the language of romance, That she is his to love and hold, if he'd join her in the dance. But dancing requires a partner who will step out on the floor, And lead with measured grace though he's never led before. Women are wonderful dancers, swaying in perfect time, While men are oft oblivious to the rhythm or the rhyme. Women dance with passion because courtship is their soul, While men stand by in muted awe of what they can't control. ------------------ me poets heart smiles seeing a pirate write such tender words of wisdom  Long John this is so perfect and sweet and written with grace... Im so enjoying seeing this side of your writing, later-romantic-pirate-gator jm I think I could need - this in my life If you're gone - baby you need to come home there's a little bit of something me In everything in you MB20 |
||
Musicmaker1969 
since 2000-06-25
Posts 589Peterborough, Ontario Canada |
What a beautiful dance you describe. Ii'm a hopeless romantic. This is definitely a dance I would love to do. In fact I am in the midst of right now. You have a wonderful way of verbalizing your dance so we can see and be part of the dance. How charming and exceptional your writing is. /¯¯\ /¯¯\ | ¥ | sheriliegh@sprint.ca \ Sheri / \Rob / Created by: Muad'dib \ / \/ |
||
|
Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I have been told many times that I miss all the signals.... Very well written Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
||
|
Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
This is so heavenly and the way you close it down is shear delight: The music is unmistakable for those who pause to hear, But too often a lifetime love is lost from unacknowledged fears. For it isn't in the message, but the medium in which its sent, That the dance's invitation may miss the one for whom its meant. I have quickly become a fan of yours and am hoping that some of your vision and the power to verse that vision rubs off on me and my muse.  |
||
|
RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
I don't remember this one and I'm sure I would if I had read it so I must have missed it... Excellent Sir....take a bow beneath my sword.. HUSG [This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 07-11-2000).] |
||
|
Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
The music is unmistakable for those who pause to hear, But too often a lifetime love is lost from unacknowledged fears. For it isn't in the message, but the medium in which its sent, That the dance's invitation may miss the one for whom its meant. .... Hey LngJhnAg, this is a CLASSIC.... I am now awaiting #2... hope you post it pretty soon... regards, sudhir |
||
|
MagnoliaBlue Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 367 |
Wonderful! MagnoliaBlue ~My Skipper Jim I love you! Your Lady June~ |
||
|
Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
LongJohn - damn straight we let fear get in the way, and it's a shame, too. Lovely poem, one of your best, me thinks. Corinne |
||
|
netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Wow! Lngjhn This is a pure poetic delight, and such wise words. ~netswan |
||
|
Lorelei54 Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 458 |
I'm sure I'm biased when it comes to saying good things about your writing, so know if I don't say it here, I'll say it in other ways. You are tops in my book!! |
||
|
Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Mike, I think this was the first "serious" poem I ever saw from you and it made me realize that you really can write!!!....and you have reinforced that opinion ever since. Great work, my friend........... |
||
|
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
LngJhnAg, I agree with Balladeer, one of your best. |
||
|
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
and I agree with Sy and Balladeer...this is wonderful wise writing! |
||
|
LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Nan - Thank you for that compliment about the last line - I have written and rewritten that last line so many times, trying to make it fit the flow - It worked me harder than any of the other lines in the poem. Thanks for recognizing that not all lines flow freely from the pen (as I'm sure you well know). Sheri - I hope the music plays sweetly, and your dance never ends. I also hope your partner doesn't step on your feet!  Jamie - Missing the signals.... Yep, that's what made me write this poem. Missing the signals can be a two-edged sword, I've found. You can miss an invitation when you need one, and you can give an invitation when you do not intend to dance. I find women are very perceptive about reading and sending signals. Mark - Thanks for that compliment. Its lucky for me you haven't read any of my kitty-kicker stuff - lol. I'm still on Doreen's hit list for my dark poem about kitties in a bag (which I later rewrote, and then used the disparaging comments I received to my own advantage - heh heh heh - Doreen didn't fall for it for a second). Queen - If it pleases m'Lady, may I say that any sword you choose to wield in my honor, is a "wound" I gladly bare. You are all class, and will always be a Queen in my book of people I highly esteem. Sudhir - Thank you for those words of encouragement. The "#1" refers to the Open Board in which this poem was first submitted. I reposted the poem because I wanted it considered for the book. There are other poems from earlier boards I have been tempted to ressurect; but I think Toerag would wither under the abuse - lol. Maggie-Blue (June) - I've noticed that you are already dancing. I hope the music is sweet, and the dips are long. Thank you for your compliment. Corinne - Fear? You? This cannot be. Incidently, this is one of the rare serious poems I've written, as I tend to write for fun, and that lends a certain light-heartedness to my subjects. I have learned that, when writing of romance, women become quite serious... and thank God for that! You make the world turn with the music you hear. Teresa - Thank you for finding delight in my pen. Have you noticed how some poems seem to strike a chord, and what joy there is when this happens? Are you dancing? Lorelei - My sweet Lorelei - The dance we share becomes richer and sweeter with every turn we take, every step we share. When I write of love, you are the ink of my pen, the inspiration of my soul. Thank you for bringing that out in me, for it has made me a better man. 'Deer - Yanno, I've read almost every poem you've written in here. I respect your talent, and I marvel at your range. It humbles me when you compliment something I do, because I truly believe that my best work is only on a par with what you write routinely. I value your friendship, and I know its made me stretch to write better. Sy - Ahhh, yes. Meeting you remains one of the memories I still smile about. Thank you for echoing 'Deer's sentiments. Of all the poets in here, I think your poems have the most unusual facets and provide the most unexpected views. I enjoy them all. Martie - As for you! When you dance, I'll bet Tigger couldn't match you stride for stride. So much life! Your words are always uplifting, and seem filled with your spirit. Thank you for your compliment. [This message has been edited by LngJhnAg (edited 07-11-2000).] |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
