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Amphitrite's Whispering Waves
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Amphitrite's Whispering Waves |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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Amphitrite's whispering waves < !signature-->Kiss the silvered shore Gazing softly 'pon Luna's eyes As so gently they implore... "Why cannot we fly?" The wind curls 'round the sky And brushes wings with night Howling to the snowy stars Cursing it's endless flight... "Why can I never sleep?" Crystal rivers glittered gold Thread throughout the land Wanting more than just to flow O'er the moonlit sands... "Why am I trapped between these banks?" A shattered soul floods the sea With cascades of lonely tears Screaming to the navy Heavens For someone to know her fears... "Why does no one understand?" And Amphitrite's whispering waves Call from the silvered shore While from the wind and river Warming words do pour.... "It is we who understand..." *Krista Knutson* "We are not seperate from spirit, we are in it." ~Plotinus~ [This message has been edited by Alwye (edited 07-10-2000).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
All I can do is shake my head. What I wouldn't give to have written this kind of poetry at your age. This is magnificent Krista. You have never failed to impress me with your writing. If you could hear me right now, you'd hear the sound of my standing ovation! Wonderful. Wonderful.  |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
*Throws all of her crappy poetry out the window* My work is nothing compared to this!  This is a beautiful piece, Krista, as always."We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Krista,sweetheart you are an incredible talent!! This is absolutley beautiful and the imagery is fantastic!! WOW! Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
And you expressed doubts about the quality of this? This was a beautiful poem Krista, I loved the form with the stanzas and then the questions, and I especially loved that ending! My favorites lines have to be "The wind curls 'round the sky And brushes wings with night Howling to the snowy stars Cursing it's endless flight..." T hat is evocative, these lines conjure up an incredible image in my mind.. Love them much... Marvelous Krista, you are truly phenomenal in everything you do. Abrahm Simons "Keep on dreamin' boy 'cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die" - Blind Melon |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
the daughter of Oceanus would agree,, very very good. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
*cringing* Uhh.. Krista... I LOVE this. Once again, we're blessed with the gift of your beautiful imagery! Can I make one eensy suggestion? Can you change the last line to "It is we who understand" ? |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Krista~ Your talent is honestly amazing. This is exquisite. Wow ! Just Wow ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
WOW Krista I think it's all been said above me...you are so talented little one Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I echo all above ... absolutely stunning Krista! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Sharon- *blushes* Thanks so much! LoveBug- NOOOOOOOOOOOOO! *jumps out your 12 story building to recapture your poetry* Hehee, good thing I can fly!  Thanks for the comments my friend! Maree- Thank you so much my friend, coming from you, it means the world. Dusk- Thank you so much sweetheart. And it is you that makes me strive to be the best I can be, my love. Prometheus- Thank you!  Chris- Now, coming from you, that means the world! And your suggestion is done.  Marge- Thank you much! tracie- Thanks! Kit- thank you also! *Krista Knutson* "We are not seperate from spirit, we are in it." ~Plotinus~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Krista* You have taken my breath away with this piece you have such a golden gift...and you use it with the grace of an angel~ |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Krissa... by far one of my favorite poems... you bring out your gift so marvelously... wonderful job dearie! "The universe is full of magical things patiently waiting for our wits to grow sharper." Eden Phillpotts *Cassandra Roseen* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Love bug threw her poetry out the window... I'm throwing my MUSE out my window... (well, i would if the moody chick was here) my my my ... well well well ... what can I say about this poem that hasnt been already said by my esteemed poetic pals... OH I KNOW... COLOR ME JADED AND CUT AND PASTE MY PICTURE NEXT TO POET ENVY IN THE DICTIONARY!!!!!!!!! (ME MUSE'S TOO) dont you ever get bored being so darn good LOL AWESOME POEM KRISTA...*why am i shouting*lol later-amazing grace-gator jm I think I could need - this in my life If you're gone - baby you need to come home there's a little bit of something me In everything in you MB20 |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Butterflies- Thank you so much, I truly and deeply appreciate it. Dawn- Thank you so much hon, I'm glad you liked it! JM- LOL, bored at being so darn good? LOL, you flatter me too much I think! *blushes* But thank you so much. And I bet that moody chick muse of yours is just workin on a phenomenal masterpiece to come...and just giving you a rest, tis all. *Krista Knutson* "We are not seperate from spirit, we are in it." ~Plotinus~ |
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