Open Poetry #8 |
.......I think of you |
Balladeer
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At times my days are very hard. The problems never stop. The world bears down relentlessly Until I want to drop. Frustration makes my muscles ache. I don't know what to do. I'm very close to giving up..... and then I think of you. I think of you and every problem Disappears from sight. No matter what the day may bring It all will work out right. Your image in my mind is all I need to get me through. My greatest weapon is the strength I get from loving you. I think of love at times as something I cannot achieve And feel that it's a fairy tale That I dare not believe. I think that I will live alone By chance, if not by choice. Love is a door that's closed to me... and then I hear your voice. I hear your voice and everything I've heard of love is true. I know that it is possible For me because of you. Your voice is my reminder that Dreams really do come true. My happiness is there thanks to The joy of loving you. Or, at the end of my long day, When I can take no more And barely have the strength in me To open up the door I know that finding happiness Is just a hopeless case Reserved for others - not for me.... and then I see your face. I see your face and all is well. I know I will survive. I know that there's a God - there must be If you are alive. I think of you - I hear your voice I see your face and then I revel in the happiness Of loving you again. [This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 07-09-2000).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Beautiful and tender thoughts. What a wonderful space to be in when the weight of the world is bearing down. "and then I think of you. and then I hear your voice and then I see your face." "I revel in the happiness of loving you again." Great work! Ain't love grand......... |
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Deb Lynne Member
since 1999-08-19
Posts 180Where blue skies meet blue ocean |
Oh MM! I stay gone for awhile & this is the first piece I read! Man, you haven't lost the touch. The ability to melt me with words & remind me of the magic of love. You truly are the best. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Awwwwwwwww ! Balladeer~ What a romantically tender piece of your heart. You've just got the heart of a lover ! It beats with such loving thoughts. Love ya', Mr. Romantic Balladeer ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
OH dear 'deer...HUSH...can't let it out HERE yet...my goodness... actually Michael - I think this is great, and once again I have to say that I admire your ability to write in so many voices. Well done my friend. K |
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Kit McCallum
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Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Well now, what more can I say Balladeer! You must know already that I loved the flow, the rhythm, and the rhyme, but ahhhh, such sweet romantic sentiments from you in this wonderful verse. Absolutely beautiful! Best wishes, /Kit |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i LOVE this poem! *wink* Whatever you do, don't bring Yoko to band practice. |
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Elizabeth
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Posts 6871Minnesota |
Sometimes, it's all we need to think of a certain special someone, and we can bear anything. Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Wow! A man with a sense of humor and a romantic pen! I don't suppose you have a twin brother in the south anywhere do ya? Beautiful Balladeer...simply beautiful. --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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MagnoliaBlue Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 367 |
Just beautiful! Thats all I need to say! ....except why isn't it a book submission? MBlue ~My Skipper Jim I love you! Your Lady June~ |
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xoxoLUVRGURLxoxo New Member
since 2000-05-01
Posts 9Corpus Christi, tx |
How utterly romantic......I wish I had a man with a sense of humor and romance |
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Lady Web Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 96Houston, Texas |
Loved it so much. Words such as yours, brings fond and warm thoughts to the romantic in all of us Nicely written |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Absolutely beautiful and very romantic. Enjoyed this one. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
you just need to be kissed for this one...(tell her I said so) so perfect, so sweet, so charming, you know what Im thinking right? ok...good...then I dont need to say it... (ohhowilovewhenyouwritelikethis)LOL well, I never said self contol was a strong trait of mine. loved this one 'dear'deer. later-romance-gator jm I think I could need - this in my life If you're gone - baby you need to come home there's a little bit of something me In everything in you MB20 |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Love is so lovely...just like you said it...wonderful!!! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
style..flow...romance...tenderness.. gentleness....what more could a reader want?? Kathleen |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
Isn't it amazing how we can be instantly healed by another person? How we can just forget our problems by looking into a loved ones eyes? That is truly the stuff that life is made of. I can't count how many times I have felt this way. You expressed it beautifully. "We have all these galaxies inside of us. And if we don't enter those in art, then I don't understand the point in doing anything."-Sam Shepard |
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LoveBug
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Oh wow... this is one of the most beautiful love poems I've read. It isn't about some distant dream, it's about something real and beautiful, the best kind of romance. Believe me, LoveBugs know these things! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Wow! I thank you all for such kind responses. It's a little off the beaten path for me to write a simple romantic poem and it's very gratifying to see it so well received. My thanks again..... |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Excellent as usual Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
It is so nice to see this romantic side of you, I hope he writes some more poetry like this(hint)! I enjoyed it! very sweet! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
How I'd love to hear the voice that's heaven to my ears Or see the face so dear that joy's the source of any tears But memories sustain me and I hope that some fine day The reason for my drawing breath will walk again this way. Beautiful poem, Balladeer! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Yeah! Balladeer, the ace, does a twist Instead of supreme ballad or sparkling wit, With a romantic rendering, he makes all lovelies swoon, Charming with an emotional voice, leads them to the moon. .... very well done, sir Balladeer... regards, sudhir |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
hmmmppphhh - writing pretty poems... making the women swoon... hmmppphhhh... incidently, I really like the way you transitioned from verse to verse; but, hmmmpppphhhh... writing pretty poetry that makes the women swoon.... sure I'm jealous!!! I also like the format, and the way everything flows. This is another great poem, 'Deer. |
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Denise
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Beautifully romantic, I agree! Denise |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Ahh yes, swooning at the master, very well done, kudos! |
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Balladeer
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Wow! I am really overwhelmed! I'll have to try this again. Thank you all VERY much! Suthern Girl.....wonderful to see you!! |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
oooh I missed this! now this was very sweet ya old coot! You've been hiding yer romantic side from all us ladies! *wink* I love the way you write 'Deer, I hope your pen never runs dry. ~Heather |
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Adrienne Junior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 20California |
Balladeer A piece such as this, guides me to look for romance in all hidden corners.... Beautifully done. |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ahh, 'Deer...stringing all of us ladies along so well...yes, Sir, you will have to do this again...and soon... and LJA if you're looking in...why haven't you yet grabbed your pen? Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Beverley Member
since 2000-07-09
Posts 97England |
If ever I thought romance was dead, you've brought it back to life. This is wonderful, amazing, just fantastique. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
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wow, not that i am amazed that you could write this, and wow, not that i am amazed that you could feel this, but wow, this touches deeply and beautifully now i just need someone to feel like this about me...*sigh* |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Wonderful, Balladeer!! This is the most beautiful love poem... So real and beautiful. Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Rindercella Member
since 1999-11-12
Posts 64La La Land |
What a pretty poem. It seems that you know how to stir the heart. Mine is stirred. Would have to agree that perhaps you should do more of this romancing. It is lovely, I think. *If the shoe fits ... the castle is yours* |
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Kelly Member
since 1999-07-03
Posts 145 |
Beautiful. Let's bring back to the top. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
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Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sometimes you blow my mind! Great, great poem, so well written A joy to read Liz |
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Sunshine
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Ah 'Liz, thank you for bringing this up again...whatever would we do without our 'Deer? Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
You loveable softie.. HUSG "If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put the foundations under them." |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I say "encore" let's have another romantic one from you. Kathleen |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You are the king of the romantics... such a lovely piece... I am glad it got brought back up. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very nice, touching to me, Balladeer. I feel much this way too. |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
I think of you - I hear your voice I see your face and then I revel in the happiness Of loving you again. Ah Balladeer...loved it!! reminds me of this one of mine I will share with you although the tenderness in yours is so much more evident... Every Moment of You It's a power that pulls me whenever you're near It escapes in your words in your whispers I hear From your soothing voice to my waiting ears Every moment of you makes me wish, you were here. It's the look in your eyes that take from me, steal All the love in my heart all the warmth that I feel All the touches of sunshine that you give me each morn Every moment of you means a new day is born. It's the tender you show me when touched in the dark As desires are rising from one tiny spark Feel the warm pulse of spirit holding close in my heart Every moment of you means less moments apart. It's the kisses you give me your lips tasting mine On the days that it's cloudy you make the sun shine It's the dreams "of together" the melody of love Every moment of you is a gift from above. M 2*17*99 |
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inyourdreams Junior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 10paradise |
this is beautiful....... |
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Sunshine
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Look who found a treasure in the archives! I'm so glad people go in, dusting off the good ones... [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 02-28-2001).] |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Oh Michael, this is absolutely beautiful and inspiring writing, I loved it! Take care, Melissa~ |
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liquidphantasy Junior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 15california |
*kisses* Seems like you're being brought up from the archives! I love it! Wonderful writing and such a special verse will live in one woman's heart forever, I'm very sure! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Balladeer, this is a treasure of a write you've shared and my goodness I'm glad I got a chance tonite to read such beautiful expression... Thank you *~coco~* |
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Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Thank you, Coco, for digging it up and for finding pleasure in it.. My thanks to all for their valuable comments....I appreciate you all |
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