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Hmm, lets try and write a Shakespear style sonnet
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Hmm, lets try and write a Shakespear style sonnet |
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Michael G Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579Nashville |
My fear comes from my hearts desire, Loosend those bindings and start, Seeing nothing through my dark heart That point, which ignites my souls fire. To begin, I step off and wander A single urge to scream, to look back From the flames that ravage and attack, Twist at me, breaking my courage forever. Think not of me, as a trembling figure And dance upon my soul. Quick thoughts that give you pleasure Bring you back as before. And when summer breaks your solemn gloom, Come to me and kiss, this fortress looms. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Think not of me, as a trembling figure And dance upon my soul. Quick thoughts that give you pleasure Bring you back as before. And when summer breaks your solemn gloom, Come to me and kiss, this fortress looms. ------------------- ooohh...now your talking..  I have a weakness for sonnets ... this is great , love your vocabulary choices ... very nice ... later-Shakes-gator jm I think I could need - this in my life If you're gone - baby you need to come home there's a little bit of something me In everything in you MB20 |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
very nice--- I still can't decide if the turn came at line 9....the bard would not be displeased Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Hmm, not bad, Michael! Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
very nice love Shakespeare, so lovely as the sun that takes my breath away far beyond the clouds as such a blue day as this, shall my heart ponder the words but to say as how well Shakespeare makes me portray the beauty of the river as it flows so musically such rhyme and such love in each and every word so oft we do forget. As you can tell I love this style of poetry makes your mind really create such magic, thx for sharing. |
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Martini Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
Excellent..... I love sonnets, something about them just makes my knees go weak |
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Jan Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 114 |
WOW - I'd say you didn't just try, you succeeded |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Well done Michael G ... Takes some work and imagination to put one of these to rest ... Nice style. |
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Michael G Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579Nashville |
Hey thanks to all of you!! I really do love to write these, ever since I studied them for my major. They are fun, and very challenging, yet very rewarding once complete. Thank you Michael G |
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