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Postcard From serenity
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Postcard From serenity |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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He's there right now hovering fearful I might breathe a breath without his essence-- so I write without his bless. I'm chain-smoking cigarettes he backs away repulsed-- as if I held a shining cross, expelling forces of the dark. "You really think you're doing something, don't you?" (mocking mocking lurking) I type and I type he paces and mutters tension building until he grabs my chair spinning me to attention commanding in demand: "If I died tonight, what would you do?" And in a cloud of icy smoke I meet his eye, surprised how steady my voice replies: "Buy new shoes." He went to bed confused. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ If it wasn't so sad - I'd laugh at your answer ! Shucks ... I'm so glad to get your 'postcard' ... I'm gonna laugh anyway ! Just not out loud !  Love and *hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Wow...this is exactly how I felt about my ex husband......loved your answer.....I just wish I could have used it!!  LOL great piece here.....just wonderful...humorous and sad at the same time!! Great poetry.... loved it!!! Julie :) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
He's there right now hovering fearful I might breathe a breath without his essence-- so I write without his bless. ----------------- "You really think you're doing something, don't you?" (mocking mocking lurking) I type and I type he paces and mutters tension building -------------- And in a cloud of icy smoke I meet his eye, surprised how steady my voice replies: "Buy new shoes." He went to bed confused. ----------------- let the worshiping begin... oh me twin...NOW ITS OFFICIAL... one of our daddies got some explaining to do... MIRRORS ... looking at you -- looking at me misery loves company... is there any other state for em...other than confused? and could someone PLEASE explain to me just WHY they are so threatend and jealous of our poetry and writing... I mean EXCUSE ME...have they not spent the last 20 odd some years dating the TV REMOTE but all I gotta do is turn on the 'puter or pick up my journal and its like i am cold busted with another man... its poetry man...OH...I KNOW... it has to do with EMOTIONS... gosh forbid we might express some of those where the light shines.. ok baby ... I'm done PURGING on your PURGE... and in case ya couldnt tell I FELT THIS ONE...(duh)  me loves ya... me PS....MAKE IT DANCING SHOES |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
dear goodness, my heart mourns for you, i do agree with Janet, dancing shoes darlin, i know how these uncomfortable, lurking, distconected nights/lifes can go, i'm with you in my old shoes, though, they used to be new, thank you for your beautiful portrait, of unappreciated, misunderstood, humor, in your strong spirit just so you know, mother to mother, i appreciate what you write, and all that you do for yourself and your kids, kindly, dearly, love < !signature--> Kindly, Redheart Angrybraids p.s. janet i loved your reply, you rock that truth all over our jornel words to our lighted page. [This message has been edited by redheart angrybraids (edited 07-08-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Serenity is quietly doing her happy screen dance again...and a nanny nanny poo poo down the hall toward the bedroom door... Thank you all my sista's!!! Me smiling again. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
here's a mista sayin that i know what tiz lke when a sista (well a wifey actually) starts breathin down my neck for the same reasons o yuh ..good one sen |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
ROFLMAO!!! Ok, I know it isn't necessarily funny to most people, but I really dig this kind of dark humor. I hug you for your troubles, laugh with you for your sense of humor and smile at your poetic grace. Good'un Seren' Lovin' it! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you all--it is so nice to have a place to go where me warped sense of humor is appreciated....love this forum much. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
excellent thoughts here ...but I have to echo Walt ... I can relate to this  |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
A very intense poem, remind me never to make you angry. The last part really stung. excellent poem. "Death makes angels of us all and put wings where we once had shoulders, smooth as raven's wings. Jim Morrison [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 07-08-2000).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
"Buying shoes, wish you were here. . . " Excellent serenity!!! I really liked this one. . . had me on my seat until the end. . . what a line!!! May have to use that one myself someday. . . Only you could blend all the elements of this poem together. . . just superb. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Serenity* This was........my life!!!!!!!!!!! OH MY But you CAN tell the tale can't you...now if I wasn't writing and "there for him"....he'd have to ignore me so this way I save him the trouble!!! And J.M. I am almost positive the vows included the remote......goodness knows "she" listens better than I would...lol Love it Serenity....there is always comfort in understanding~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks to the guys, Sveetie Sven, as always, Rex Allen, I appreciate your reading very much, brian madden, don't worry, don't think that you could get me mad... and "butterflies"--thanks. I was really surprised at the reactions this got. Altho I can't say it made me happy that others could relate, I do feel a little less "alone" so thanks to all again... |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
ROFL - you're poetry is one of a kind, serenity... You gave me a much needed smile this morning with this one - though I sensed some tumultuous emotion behind it as well. ((HUGS)) to you. Michael |
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