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The Night the Sky Erupted
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The Night the Sky Erupted |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
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The Night the Sky Erupted Can we open that night again when the moon curved around its shadow and the air hummed when I leaned against you into your arms weight as you crept your hand around then cupped my waiting as we watched the night explode across the western sky you whispered something into my ear and it didn’t matter what for your breath was like fire and I could feel it too cascading chartreuse ribbons as whistling energy erupted into coins that melted behind the palm trees and turned to sand along the beach that waited in the horizon and I could see the musk and sultry strands of my life fizzle and turn to wishes as the moon burned in the ocean cooled your scarlet eyes in the blue of them I fell and you just smiled as your hand held the sky against my cheek and I wondered then if all this searching had led to this conclusion for the sand was warm and held in my passion but if I moved just so against you I would be for one minute complete and then the sky erupted. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 07-05-2000).] |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Wow! That was a great poem.  I love the night sky. Great Job!"The universe is full of magical things patiently waiting for our wits to grow sharper." Eden Phillpotts *Cassandra Roseen* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
OH MAN!!!!!! Have Mercy on me Martie-girl ... whew!!! lordy lordy... talk about imagery talk about sensual poetry talk about depth of emotion talk about MY POET ENVY OF THIS ONE... oh man...my muse may never come back after this jewel ... SUPERB MY DEAR...SUPERB the only thing left to say is...SUBMIT!!!!! excuse me now...I need to go lie down...  later-amaze-me-again-gator jm |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Florentines of a dear caring heart decorative evocation of fine yet unique combinations of natures natural art all over lapping in poetic literary art intricately woven into exquisite tapestries with accompanying laced litany and reflections in prose not to mention the most beautiful peace I’ve seen. Sorry I haven't gotten a letter off to you yet I'll have to drink another cup of tea wake up think what I want to send. Love and prayers, (lucky) Dale |
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AndrewDL Junior Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 24California |
The imagery in this poem was excellent. A photograph couldn't have done much better than this. Beautiful work. -Andrew Trust too much, and you may be deceived, but trust too little and you will live in torment forever. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
you whispered something into my ear and it didn’t matter what for your breath was like fire and I could feel it too cascading chartreuse ribbons as whistling energy erupted into coins that melted behind the palm trees and turned to sand along the beach that waited in the horizon and I could see the musk and sultry strands of my life fizzle and turn to wishes as the moon burned in the ocean cooled your scarlet eyes in the blue of them I fell and you just smiled as your hand held the sky against my cheek wow that was beautiful, my screen is ablaze with passion tenderness and beauty. What a show. A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Cassandra--I love it too...it can be inspirational. Janet-- you just blow we away with your comment, sweet lady...thank you, now get up girl and boogie. Hi Dale--sure would like a nice long letter about all that thining you did while in the mountains...I know there is a river there and many trees...waiting patiently...Hugs! Andrew--they say a picture is worth a thousand words, so you pay me a great compliment. brian--so happy that I made your screen blaze...I don't think I've ever done that before. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ My god - what sensual pleasure. Seems someone remembers the first time the fireworks went off, huh ? I find that it is one of your BEST - so just submit the damn thing ! !  Doesn't get any more perfect than this. It's a BIGGIE ! ~*Marge*~< !signature--> ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] [This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 07-05-2000).] |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Martie....anything that cupped your waiting would explode!!!  Seriously, Martie, this is so perfect...which doesn't surprise me at all coming from you. Beautiful writing..... VOTED!!!! [This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 07-05-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Absolutely stunning Martie! The imagery, the flow, the sentiments ... an incredibly wonderful poem you've penned, I just loved this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
She takes instructions so well ! Guess what I'm doing here ????? YES ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oops ...missed the book logo ... ignore me while I click |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
ooooohhh I just love getting my way.. i knew you couldnt resist me AND Margie.. and how often do ya get two poets in one day asking you to "submit" LOLseems like after reading this poem..you already did some "submittin" LOL  LOL at Balladeer...hes doing some "cupping" of his own...  OK Im done being obnoxious for now thanks for letting me worship this amazing poem twice in one day later-firecracker-gator jm |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Whew! Beautiful beyond words! Denise |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Phew! The warm fuzzies! Martie, this is beyond describable words! This was WOW! Beautiful in every sense of the word! You brought such a deep, peaceful sigh to me! Ahhhh! [This message has been edited by WhtDove (edited 07-05-2000).] |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
"cascading chartreuse ribbons as whistling energy erupted into coins that melted behind the palm trees" --WOW Martie, only you could create such a unique and stunning image as this. Deep, loving, and sensual words here. I'm suffering poet's envy along with you JM! and I'm voting too! (click!) *Krista Knutson* "We are not seperate from spirit, we are in it." ~Plotinus~ |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marge--What am I going to do with you girlfriend, between you and Janet Marie...I guess I'll just enjoy having you as friends...that's what I'll do! Balladeer--LOL on the explode, but seriously, thank you for your always possitive comments..you're the best! Kit--Thank you so much for the stunning...I'm glad you enjoyed the poem! Kit, Marge, Janet...thank you for coming back and voting, smiles to you from me, big time! Denise--I think you found the words...thanks! Whtdove--thank you for such an enthusiastic reply...made me smile. Krista--I am the one that admires you...thanks so much for the vote! |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Oh, Martie, man, oh, man, this poem is incredible! I think it is the most sensual poem I've ever read - unbelievable imagery - and I've been many years attempting to write sensual poetry - impossible, so far, to describe the images and feelings inside. You did extremely well. I don't think anyone could do better! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Martie, The sky exploded with this extaordinary poem, as only you could do it Great work, Martie. Some of your est Liz |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Martie - you lil devil, you. This is a great description of a terrific moment - man - you are really really sensual beneathe your mask of innocence - this is a wonderful poem - you are such a lil devil, you. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Can't believe I missed this one. Such power and feeling has never been painted on canvas with the way you paint with your words. Simply excellent. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Now that's what I call a poem! Corinne |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Rosemary--This is a wonderful compliment...I consider your poetry some of the best. I was waiting for a phone call and wrote this to kill time...started out to be about the fireworks display the night before...but I just got carried away with a metaphor. Thank you for reading this, Liz...I'm glad that you liked it. Hugs! Lng jhn---I'm an angel not a devil...but I think you were giving me a compliment...so thanks! Mark--a great compliment for someone who considers poetry-- art. Corinne--I'm glad you liked it...thank you! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Beautifully written Martie. You know what I think of your poetry and this is without question one of your finest. Exceptional poem. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Beautiful writing, I was there!!!! I could FEEL the night sky wanting to explode any second! *whew* good'un girlie ~Heather |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Sorry, forgot to vote. love it still... Dale |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mike--Thank you for reading it and for your wonderful words. Heather--I'm glad you could see this...thank you for reading and such lovely comments lucky--thanks for coming back to vote! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wonderful use of highly imaginative word pictures. I travelled there on the wings of the words. Absolutely great! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
How many Martie poems have I already read? and loved? and sung the praises of? and how many pale in comparison to this one? All of them!!!!!!!!! ILY |
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