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Silent soul
Member

since 2000-06-10

Posts 73
tx,usa

0 posted 2000-07-05 02:05 PM

I am worthless
its plain to see
I am worthless
a failure thats me
I am worthless
from head to toe
I am worthless
but who would know
I am worthless
cant you see
I am worthless
just leave me be
I am worthless
just let me be blue
I am worthless
just let me die
I am worthless
that is NO lie
I am worthless
just let me kill
I am worthless
but I can TRY to heal
I am worthless
peace be with you
I am worthless
never again shall I feel blue
I am worthless
I know its true
but tell me
am I worthless to you

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peace <3
Silent
Love begins with a smile,grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear

[This message has been edited by Silent soul (edited 07-05-2000).]

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

1 posted 2000-07-05 02:18 PM

Not to this one you are not. This was a wonderful approach and I loved the ending:

"but tell me
am I worthless to you"
Loved it.

Silent soul
Member

since 2000-06-10

Posts 73
tx,usa

2 posted 2000-07-05 02:32 PM

why thanks anymore comments

peace <3
Silent
Love begins with a smile,grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear

Wren
Member

since 2000-07-05

Posts 312

3 posted 2000-07-05 07:10 PM

Very good! You captured the emotion of worthlessness very well! I liked it alot.

Silent soul
Member

since 2000-06-10

Posts 73
tx,usa

4 posted 2000-07-05 08:15 PM

thanks a bunch

peace <3
Silent
Love begins with a smile,grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear

kat
Member

since 2000-05-20

Posts 387

5 posted 2000-07-05 09:21 PM

Silent soul, no you're not worthless. It's very obvious to all of us here that you have alot of talent. You express yourself beautifully. I grew up with my share of negativity and I got to a point where I saw the light and realized that I had something to offer. I look forward to the day that you will feel that in yourself. You express your emotions well. Take care

kat

Silent soul
Member

since 2000-06-10

Posts 73
tx,usa

6 posted 2000-07-05 10:36 PM

thanks

peace <3
Silent
Love begins with a smile,grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear

tracie66
Member Elite

since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

7 posted 2000-07-07 04:59 AM

noones worthless.....this is deeply expressed, but the ending great

But tell me
am I worthless to you

well done
Tracie~

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

Silent soul
Member

since 2000-06-10

Posts 73
tx,usa

8 posted 2000-07-07 01:06 PM

thanks

peace <3
Silent
Love begins with a smile,grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

9 posted 2000-07-07 01:18 PM

liked the repetition scheme here...this almost rings in my head like a persistent song"Im worthless IM WORTHLESS"....

how can anyone who can express himself so well be worthless?

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

10 posted 2000-07-07 02:15 PM

a powerful poem it stings because I think we have all reached a period where we believe this, Alot a pain in this. I hope you are ok, take care and take it easy.

A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

JulieAnn
Senior Member

since 2000-06-12

Posts 754
Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!!

11 posted 2000-07-07 02:18 PM

this reminded me a bit of the song "I'm a loser Baby" And I am sure you are not worthless....noone is....so chin up...there is LOTS of life to live!!!

Julie :)

Silent soul
Member

since 2000-06-10

Posts 73
tx,usa

12 posted 2000-07-07 04:32 PM

thanks alot you peoplereally help me

peace <3
Silent
Love begins with a smile,grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

13 posted 2000-07-07 04:53 PM

Do you feel that way? If you keep repeating it so many times you are going to totally convince me that you are worthless...ha..ha..That's probably why you feel that way yourself...someone in your life kept telling you that.
But I believe you are valuable.
You write good poetry.
It's up to you to find your value, your gifts, your abilities, and your opportunities and go for it.
I think you have already figured that out on your own...this is just a confirmation..ha..ha..take care...James

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

14 posted 2000-07-08 11:47 AM

  Anyone who can pull off a wonderful ending
  like you just did in this piece is:

          "NOT WORTHLESS!!!!!"

Paint your words upon the eager waiting canvas of my heart.....~Sunny1~

Silent soul
Member

since 2000-06-10

Posts 73
tx,usa

15 posted 2000-07-08 11:52 AM

thanks a bunch

peace <3
Silent
Love begins with a smile,grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear

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