»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #8
»
its not my way
| Open Poetry #8 |
|
its not my way |
|
|
Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
|
when days and weeks start to run together and I go unnoticed unthought of by you for more times than I like to admit and I want to jump and scream and yell across the miles don’t you worry about me don’t you wonder why I stopped sending me to you in print don’t you need me anymore or think about me like I do you? but no no screams will eliminate this lack of need no its not my way to yell at a closed door hoping you are on the other side listening for me too instead I will just quietly walk my want of you away [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 06-12-2000).] |
||
| © Copyright 2000 zoe d. - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"its not my way to yell at a closed door" and "instead I will just quietly walk my want of you away " great lines, corozan ... you get better and better at describing emotions in a new and unique way.... and that's why you are truly a "poet" |
||
|
Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks doreen, you know there are certain people that I look for in replies (though all are nice, and sometimes the new people are a refreshing surprise) but you are one that I respect, my poems go to bed restless if they go without your comments  thank you much |
||
|
brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
when days and weeks start to run together and I go unnoticed unthought of by you for more times than I like to admit and I want to jump and scream and yell across the miles Sometimes I just want to scream as well, let it all go. A powerful poem, packed with emotions. its not my way to yell at a closed door hoping you are on the other side listening for me too instead I will just quietly walk my want of you away You have made the right choices he made the wrong ones. a wonderful poem, really enjoyed reading this. ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. manic street preachers "Culture Alienation Borebom and Despair" "I know I believe in nothing but it is my nothing" -faster MSP "And you see, I kind of shiver to conformity Did you see, the way I cower to authority, you see And my life, it's a series of compromises anyway It's a sham, and I'm conditioned to accept it all, you see" six by Paul Draper. ----- |
||
|
Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
K, I think that you and Doreen, write very simular. This was very powerful. I liked it very much..... Parker |
||
|
Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Corazon~ I know this and it hurts...the words as much as the feeling that goes with them, you captured each painful step and made me ache with the feeling like it was happening all over again.... I will just quietly walk my want of you away Excellent lines!!! Thank you for sharing this piece~ |
||
|
amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
It was more of prose than a poem.. You showed a lot of dignity..when in love you must hold yourself at a respectable position and never beg for it..if its true it may happen even if its required to stand the test of time..otherwise it may perish..in both the cases don't let your selfesteem erode away.. Sincerely A_L |
||
|
RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Not many of us left here now sweetheart, of the old clan, that is... Your mum was a wise lady you know...as I think of her words in your mail, maybe I'm thinking, you should as well...not easy, definitely not easy and you speak the feelings of many, including myself.. May we all know a peaceful night's sleep and a day filled with sunshine and of course the inevitable rainbow.. Big HUSG |
||
|
doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i disagree with amazon lover... sometimes begging for it can be fun... especially when he finally says... "Ok. Come on" and you answer, "Sorry, lost interest. Busy with someone else" LOL seriously though, what I really disagree with mostly is that this is definitely poetry... in the true sense of the word... no prose here thanks for the kind compliment, corazon... i always read your work every time i see it... because you are one fine writer, lady |
||
|
Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Once again, Corazon, you take one of life's emotions and explain it so well and with such style. Walking away is one thing but..walking away the want of someone.....what an incredibly powerful line that is! First-class, as always. ref your comment: dress as if you were in the '60's. The mind boggles at the thought.  |
||
|
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Dynamite writing, Corazon! Your writings are always unique and well done! Always a pleasure! Denise |
||
|
Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
...no its not my way to yell at a closed door hoping you are on the other side... So simply put, and yet so powerful -- quite an effective image, and one that in and of itself made the poem worth reading. --Kess YOUR LIFE IS A TEST It is only a test ... If this were your Actual Life, you would have been given better instructions! |
||
|
Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You've left quite an image in my mind's eye Corazon ... one of want, disappointment, and yet the gathering realization of changing tides. This is very well done. Best wishes, /Kit |
||
|
hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh hon, your talent shines, but I can't wait for the day when you've written out all this pain and that happiness I so wish for you shines through. Hugs Ruth |
||
|
Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
brian thanks, yep there are times to scream and times not too...sigh haleyja, I wonder how you see us similar, as I love doreen's writing, and always identify with it, so I will take your statement as a high compliment, but I fail to see it myself, I only wish to write as well as her butterflies...thank you, that this touched you so much makes me feel like I did something right amazon lover well thank you for liking it, but wonder about the prose comment... and doreen thank you for your comments...I know my free verse is not complicated and hard to understand, leading the reader in varied dimensions, but I always thought of it as poetry still....thanks for your confirmation rg....I know this place is changing and growing...and yep...I think we should do the same...maybe the old stuff needs to be rethought and refreshed hugs for your night, hope your sleep was restful balladeer figured you'd go for the sixties lol....and I used to dress like that too when I was sixteen...too young to know what I was really offering I guess lol...thanks for the compliments denise...thank you love it when you commentskyfire thank you, it always amazes me, the poems that just sit down and write themselves in a few minutes are the ones that are the most touching....thank you kit, that you read all of those emotions touches me, your comments mean much hoot, pretty soon girl, you have inspired me thank you much lady |
||
|
wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
such a sweet purty girl and unhappy it seems either kiss a rose or go pull the wings off a butterfly whichever makes you happy...liked this poem alot |
||
|
Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
walt you crack me up....kiss a rose or pull the wings off a butterfly....lolol....thanks |
||
|
Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
you deserve to be on top. Parker |
||
|
Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I stopped in for a second read and what's this I see????????? Wingless butterflies!! OHHHH I can't look!!! Walt shame on you for even suggesting! |
||
|
Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks parker and butterflies....yep...I know....I will kiss a rose any day...maybe all the butterfly lovers need give walt a spanking |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
