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its tough to find a soul mate on the Monday morning commute
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its tough to find a soul mate on the Monday morning commute |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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I will have to say that the got up late driving too fast putting on mascara with one eye and looking for flashing lights with the other Monday morning commute is not exactly conducive to finding love but now the drive home on my highway of dreams that’s another story it’s a passing fancy of mine you see I like to study faces and wonder who goes home to who and who is out there for me a profile sticks and nudges me for a second look I slow down he speeds up he looks at me as I look at him simultaneous smiles but his lane slows mine speeds on deadlines take me away faster and faster til I pull into the drive alone one time too many and I think I must rethink my going straight home everyday perhaps I missed a side street where slower going allows a look behind the smile and maybe just maybe it turns into a gasomat where hands could reach out and touch at the rack where they sell sunflower seeds chips and fate… its tough to find a soulmate on the Monday morning commute |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i liked this corazon but remember us men we get married and still like to catch the ladies eyes o yuh! |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I know that feeling all too well Corazon ... great expression here! Life is just too darn busy and that highway just keeps pulling you along ... well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
[email protected] on the freeway...thanks walt  thanks kit....and yep it sure does pull, if you want love you gotta find the brakes |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~corazon i really enjoyed this! you have penned some very good thoughts here. the highway of life, goes faster and faster...gotta take the time to slow down and enjoy. oh and you know what they say right. when you aren't looking for love, that's when you find it. guess what? they're right lol. take care. amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Corazon,...love the style used to write this one,...as well as the little story it holds. hehe. Cute,...'tis so true as the others have said ,...we must slow down a bit at times and not let life "pass" us by. Very nice writing. *Peace. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Your making me laugh Corazon...may all your commutes be romantic ones. James |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Oh great! Now I can never just drive to work and sing with reckless abandon again! I'll be too paranoid... looking for that glance! Hmmm... what is she looking at? lol!! A great poem! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
he looks at me as I look at him simultaneous smiles but his lane slows mine speeds on deadlines take me away faster and faster til I pull into the drive alone one time too many ... well, it is so, monday blues are terrible to face, but then the freeway, and the rush and the deadlines, are they not everyday whims of this corporate oriented world... I remember the beautiful words 'no time to stand and stare', how much these words ring at such times.... .... beautiful work corazon, really worth reading over and over again... regards, sudhir. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Loved this, the rush to work followed by in no rush to get home, and how do we meet someone if we just go from point to point, as in ships passing in the night? Corinne |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
So it's in black and white and therefore as true as in mail.. I love you poems of late, they really talk of the most common emotions known to man and yet so few are capable of describing them, so many use buttery or flowery words. but really and truthfully, it is the basicfoundation of us all to love and do things in such a simple way that soemtimes we miss the simplicity out and give those deeds/emotions grander words, when really the most wonderful of all is as you are describing of late...hope that makes sense...I'm not to good at vocalising these days... I'm just letting my thoughts flow from my mind to the keyboard.. (a little biit of editing here).. Big HUSG |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
rg, gonna start with the last first, but thanks, and no you vocalize just fine, love is love, no matter how you describe it...and it sure is good to see you ...love you girl corrine...you caught that huh, rushing to work but not home? yep, you read it perfect thankssudhir..."no time to stand and stare" wow that does say plenty...its been a long time for me too...and I would have to say we need that...we need make time for the soul to stare and make connections ....thanks trew, just tint your windows and keep them rolled up if you are going to sing....lol...that's what I do *g* jmlee glad to make you smile thanksspitfire and aimster, yep we DO need slow down if we are to partake of the pleasures in life.....imagine what you would lose in a kiss if it was just a drive by *g* thanks for the read |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Oh boy can I relate to this one! I'm always looking at cars around me to see who is in them. And usually when I see an attractive man who smiles...there is a car seat in the back. Oh well...such is life, right? I love this!"That man has shown himself great who has never grieved in evil days and never bewailed his destiny." --Seneca |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Very nice. Enjoyed muchly. |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
really enjoyed this.....I too will be looking soon......too many faces......how do we choose?? well maybe we can JUST look LOL!! Nice work! Julie  |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Girl, you need to start taking the bus! Not only can you check out everybody there but you can also watch the cars going by and, because you're looking down, you can get a better view of the entire, er, scenario. Leave the driving to us! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corazon~ Country roads take me home and all along the way ... smiles and waving of hands beckoning me with friendly gestures. I'm glad I passed this way ! Honey child ... flirt with them all ! Enjoyed this very much. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks all, glad you enjoyed the ride |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i loved this one, corazon seems like all too often, i just think of my life and you write it down i saw this fox of a guy on the road yesterday and i swear it was all i could do not to flag him down... instead, i just kept driving  and home again to ratatat on a keyboard something's wrong with this picture great job on this, ms. c |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
lol@flag him down....yep have gripped the steering wheel a couple of times to keep myself from doing the same...rofg....thanks doreen |
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