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I Bring You Here At Night
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I Bring You Here At Night |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
I Bring You Here At Night Eyes wide open as I dream My nights are filled of fantasy Ahead I stare so blankly Blocking all reality Controlling all that is Of my dreams existence Mind racing, finding visions Creating my experience Surrounded by the darkness I escape into my solitude Concentration at it’s fullest To my vision I stay glued Steadily my eyes do close As my pillow becomes you Alone no longer do I rest It’s you I’ve brought here too So enveloped in my moment My mind acting out the scene I clench onto my pillow tightly As I kiss you in my dream For a moment almost believing That you’re really here with me Keeping my eyes so tightly closed So my dream is all I see Disguising any loneliness In the silence of the night My pillow is just my pillow It’s that reality I try to fight |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Waking dreams, lonely fantasies. Excellent, jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Kat~ this blew me away! This is a fantastic poem.  -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
This is a wonderful poem kat!  ~ In your dreams I will follow In reality I am hollow I am made of fantasy dreams No physical substance just thought beams I am real in your mind Of steaming hot insectual kind If you're spooked and want to run Nightmares can be part of the fun We can start on a sandy beach My body is sand, you're in my reach Your body temperature begins to rise You feel me close, I'm on your eyes A vision of me in your glasses A familiar thought, then it passes It's getting hot and you want to get wet You swim like a fish, I become a fisherman's net I catch you and pull you in Your body is wiggling I have a grin  My hands around you holding you tight Your release for freedom becomes your fight You're slippery substance helps your escape With your flipping and flopping and thin body shape Happy for your freedom you're on your way Suddenly you're awake in the next day~ Interesting poem you dreamt up here pickle…umm! Kat The last response had me ROTFLMAO too! Thanks for the funny times together! |
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MysticalNights Member
since 2000-05-17
Posts 112Oklahoma |
Excellent work kat. Keep dreaming!! A Dream is a Wish the Heart Makes... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kat~ Enjoyed the state of your dreams. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Prometheus: Thanks! I'm glad you loved it! SEA: It blew you away? Wow! Thanks! I'm so thrilled that you loved it so much!! Insect: Hmmmm..I think that dream you're talking about went something like this. On a beach a sit and ponder What my day will be I wonder But then I see you through my glasses  It's with Claudette you're having clashes My body temperature begins to rise As I see the rage in Claudette's eyes I run quick, I want to get wet Not quite looking I hit your volleyball net You laugh at me as I fall down Entangled with the net that brought me to the ground I look up again, you're in a fisherman's suit Tellin me, lets go fishin, you'll have a hoot With those words you reach down to me From the volleyball net, I set myself free I reach for your hand to pull myself up But I can't because you're holding a cup A fishing rod covered with sand And a cup of worms in the other hand I shake my head and smile a bit Looking to the side, Claudette's taking a fit I jump to my feet and head for the water Claudette catches up to you and now she's even hotter I swim like a fish trying to get away You run my direction and Claudette is heading your way She grabs you and holds you in her famous wrestler's lock In shock and disbelief, all I do is gawk With her strong arms around you she holds you tight Your release for freedom becomes your fight I can't stand it no more, I feel the need to set you free I start yelling back at her but then she turns on me You slip into the water and from her hold you break As we both head for the shore running to escape Happy for your freedom You're running all the way I hear a sound that wakes me Thank God! I'm awake! It's a new day! LOL Yes it was an interesting dream I dreamt up here but as you can see I think some of the dream you might have misunderstood or I don't know. Anyways that's why I decided to rewrite it for you. You might notice some small changes in it. LMAO!! You're welcome! I have fun also pickle. Oh wait a minute! I forgot! You called ME pickle not the other way around. LOL Thanks insect I'm glad you enjoyed my poem MysticalNights: Thanks so much! I'm glad you loved it! Marge: Thanks! The state of my dreams can be pretty interesting as you can see..lol. kat [This message has been edited by kat (edited 07-04-2000).] |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Excellent, excellent piece that's done with great precision. Ypu are a very talented poet and I hope that you keep up the great work! Nathan |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Nathan: Thank-you! Thank-you so much for that wonderful compliment! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem and I hope in the future that I can continue to write poems that you will enjoy. I thank-you again! kat |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I loved this Kat! I started to copy some of my favorite lines, but just kept copying the next verse ... next verse ... heck, I would have repeated the whole poem! Wonderful sentiments ... simply dreamy! Best wishes, /Kit |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Kit: Thanks! lol Nah! No need to copy the whole poem. The compliment alone that you've given me by saying that is thanks enough. kat |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
really liked the poem, know this feeling well "Death makes angels of us all and put wings where we once had shoulders, smooth as raven's wings. Jim Morrison |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Brian: Thank-you! I'm glad you liked it. I have a feeling there's quite a few of us that know this feeling. Thanks again! kat |
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