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You are a tyranny |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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Your tanks are rolling again over my love torn republic spreading more violence from the bosom of your country. I thought that peace between us was declared. I had broken down the borders and built so many bridges You let me cross to kiss, burned my passage and left me stranded. Now you are rising as the fascist army and barbed boundary. My devotions were cemented in your heart. I was a patriot to your desire. You made a work camp of me, exploiting my resources. I could never meet production standards. Wedding vows would make us king and queen. You hate power-sharing democracy, Elected yourself government and sour lover. Litigated with foreign policy I was crushed by regime. You address me in false amnesty, inventing new languages to silence my arguments. I shall summon a revolution on your tyranny. Freedom shall be won under the guillotine. ===== "It is dangerous to be right when the government is wrong". Voltaire A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 07-03-2000).] |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Brian, you certainly have a way with words. Such a sorrowful and vengeful poem, but, with much right to be angry, as I am assuming that you are talking about the civil wars and disagreements in Ireland? Correct me if I am wrong. Well written!  Take care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
strong words and images here Bri-gator me thinks you should run for election  like seeing the way you keep trying new style and subject in your poetry... (must be nice to have a muse who STICKS around) LOL (hey...I'm not bitter)  later-irish tater eve What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly ~LaoTzeTao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Melissa, thanks for your interruption on the poem. It has been very helpful as I now realise that I have focused too much on the political images. I have changed some of the images as a result. I have wrote some anti war poems but they were terrible, I try to avoid writing about current issues. The image of the war is more of a metaphor. Thanks for your wonderful response. Jan, me a politician? There are alot of changes I would make, a socialist government that worked for the people. NO fat cats in my party! Thanks for your wonderful comments, a muse my kingdom for a muse. I don't think of myself as having a muse. Unknown forces motivate me. LOL. If i find your muse I will return her ASAP. A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Mmhhmm Brian,..I do dig this one lots. Aagghh,...love the way you write,..it makes me scream there you see??? hehe. Love the metaphor,...perfect one I might add for what this type of situation can do to you. Ok,...going now to read it again. Take care. Thanks for sharing. *Peace. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Boy, you sure painted an image here Brian! Loved this ... smiled everytime you etched a new image! I think there's a few people out here who've been in the same "war" ... great poem! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
love this, love the way you wove the images together....love/war,anger,tyranny wow your message hits perfect your quote at the end is the perfect accent also |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
SpitFire, sorry to make you scream. Whatever I did wrong I won't do it again.lol. thanks for your wonderful reply. I think we all have snippiered hearts to nurse. Kit, thanks for your wonderful reply. I am going to work out some new strategies, as I have yet to get a victory. You win some you lose more.. Corazon, all I can say to your wonderful words is THANK YOU for reading and replying. A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 07-04-2000).] |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Brian,i took this poem to be literal--meaning one country had invaded another but i took a closer look at words like "king and queen","sour lover" and realised that this poem is about a domineering dominating lover... love your metaphorical images..always impressed and speechless |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I think your metaphors are right on, Brian, and very well thought out. Very cleverly done... |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Brain, Don't you ever go to sleep..? This was supposed to be a surprize for the morning crew. By the way this one looks like it could surprize one or two. Thanks my friend |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Kaile, When I posted this first alot of people thought it was about a war, so I had to change the focus. Anyway thanks for your kind words. Balladeer, thank you for your reply. I think we are all casualities of love. Lucky, LOL, I am asleep right now, I am able to sleep and read poetry at the same time. ok that is a lie. I am in Ireland, 5 hrs time difference. it is 11.25 am here. Though I guess I do almost live here better be careful or Ron might charging me rent. LOL Thanks for your reply. yes I love surprising people, question though Shouldn't YOU be asleep? "The stars will explode in the sky O but they don't, do they? Stars have their moment and then they die" Nick Cave |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Alright Brian, Yes,, I'm gooing to slpeeepp,,, why yam I aaaaawake, well I jussssst kan't tell ya's. I don;t meanta bump ya ta ofteen, but it is a good piece... So ^&^$ em. see ya yamorrow. lucky |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW Brian, this is Excellent and the metaphors perfect! Loved it Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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