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Katrina Katrina New Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5
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Faster in the morning now my mind is speeding red cloaked in darkened sheathing like the shroud around the dead. Faster in the morning now screaming silent with the pain my mind a whirring vision full hot with acid rain. Faster in the morning now I must unleash the rage! Quick to find a pen, and then bleed it to a page. Calmer after writing the painful throbbing dulled the aching wash has ebbed the vertigo has lulled. I pull on my facade erect my little smile. It's just another morning, another mountain mile. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Oh What a beauty to start with in this beautiful place.... Katrina, WELCOME to PASSIONS  And Enjoy your stay here... regards, sudhir Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Excellent first post! Very intense! I like it. Welcome to the family! I hope you enjoy your time here. Please check your email for a special message.  |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
.gif) Welcome to Passions Katrina!! You captured my attention twice...once for the name...my precious daughter shares it and for this work of art. You captured the essence of poetry within your weave. Very well written, thank you for sharing it~ |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
This deserves a Standing Ovation Welcome to Passions Katrina I KNOW you'll enjoy it here |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Welcome to Passions. Wonderful poem to start with. Calmer after writing the painful throbbing dulled the aching wash has ebbed the vertigo has lulled This is so true for us all. Beautifully written. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Welcome to passions! A well written poem, capturing fear and darkness. Corinne |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
A captivating poem.....hope to read more Blessed Be, beth |
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Katrina Katrina New Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5 |
Thanks all! Everyone is so friendly here! Butterfly, by the way, Katrina is the best name ever, but shhh don't say that to loud |
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Blondie Member
since 1999-08-06
Posts 307Ohio |
Wonderful first point my friend! Excellent piece to start off with. Now just because your my cousin doesn't mean you can start doing better than me, haha. |
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Cutie Putootie Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 54Ohio |
Great work, hope to see you around Katrina! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
that was sure a great first post to make an entrance with..the first few stanzas were powerful and intense,like tidal waves...and i too calmed down with the paragraph "Calmer after writing..." looking 4ward to more!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
WOW...I am so taken with this poem... EXCEPTIONAL WRITING!!!!! every inch of this is perfect.. the imagery.. the rhyme.. the cadence and flow.. the pace building... the concept of the poem... excellent... the ONLY thing wrong with this poem IS-- that I didnt write it  well now that I have serious poet envy.. let me stop worshiping and welcome you to Passions!!! take care jm What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly ~LaoTzeTao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Faster in the morning now I must unleash the rage! Quick to find a pen, and then bleed it to a page. Calmer after writing the painful throbbing dulled the aching wash has ebbed the vertigo has lulled. I pull on my facade erect my little smile. It's just another morning, another mountain mile. WOW and ouch, this one aches. THe last verse in especially powerful I think we are all guilty of wearing those fake smiles to hide the pain. intense poem, well written, and I hope everything is Ok. by the way, WELCOME TO PASSIONS. "Death makes angels of us all and put wings where we once had shoulders, smooth as raven's wings. Jim Morrison |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW!! An excellent poem here Katrina. Loved it muchly Welcome to Passions! Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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