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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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love boundless sliding seemingly through slivers of broken sky in dreamless space love bloodless feeble, non-existent glides smoothly over cold marbled slates of skin love leafless flattened foliage stem fallen, drifts loss of hope love seamless frayed, pulled apart a strip of unravelled stitching love endless careless words... wordless Angel of Darkness July 2000 Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
o man...sad, but sweet...and beautiful too...Thank you, Dark Angel... |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
So sad yet so very lovely. You express your emotion so beautifully in this. Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
A love poem full of despair, but so very well expressed with a great presentation  Take care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I felt like I was watching a rock fall slow motion down a hill to silently crash at the bottom. wordless...excellent.  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
It is so hard to explain, LOVE, nice touch. I like "a strip of unravelled stitching." Certainly does make you come apart at the seams that "crazy little thing called love." Nicely done! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Poet you are ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
such sad emotions...expressed so very well I really like the format... added to the feeling of falling beautiful in its darkness.. take care, jm What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly ~LaoTzeTao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
i really loved the play on words in this poem, it gave me a down to earth feeling, in a watery sort of way. Kindly, Redheart Angrybraids |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
boundless dreamless bloodless leafless seamless endless careless wordless I was happy to see the omission of the word hopeless Beautiful Maree jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Serenity..Thank YOU! for your lovely reply ESP, Thank you so much for stopping by and your lovely reply. Melissa, Thanking you so much Sharon Thanks sweetie, for your always lovely replies Ethome, Yes it does, doesn't it? Thanks so much Marge, You are such a sweetie Marge, thank you! JM Thanking you so much for your lovely reply Redheart, Kewl! glad you loved it! Jamie, Hopeless??? well I nearly put that in there, decided against it Thanks sweetie for your lovely reply. [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 07-03-2000).] |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
I'm glad I caught this before going to bed....you catch me with your expressions every time and like Sharon said, like a rock falling, wordless (can't quote cause all the posts have gone...help !!) HUSG Yuk!!! It's so hot here the windows are open and some spider just landed on me and Snoops is sleeping....how dare he ! Now I have to wake up and toss him out....*sigh* |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wow M.... wow... K |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Marvelous expression and presentation here Coco |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
You express your feelings very sadly but with a beautiful caste |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
One word--TIMELESS. Loved the format. |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
"glides smoothly over cold marbled slates of skin" Hell Maree you are really getting quite brilliant at dreaming up new imagery; "marbled slates of skin" must rank as some of the best i can remember seeing for a while. Excellent work .. one impressed MP |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Your writing is so tenderly written, very soft and this is a piece filled with lots of expression and emotion..good job Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
i do, i just love all the words they are perfect together, this is such an intese read, it's really beautiful, my favorite of yours so far, it just makes my skin tingle. Kindly, Redheart Angrybraids |
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