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tuesday is tired of dying
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tuesday is tired of dying |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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this tuesday died just like all the tuesdays before a pick a fight with me friday starts the funeral cycle next comes the working really hard to stay away from you saturdays the house is clean and the pretend we are happy sundays and the monday morning as i get ready for work promise that i will leave on tuesday i can't take this anymore but the leaving never comes if i had packed my things i say on tuesday like i promised instead of driving to work and i shake my head i should be packing but forward momentum takes me the unfamiliar of leaving slowly losing ground coffee and good morning's greeting win another day and tuesdays starlight mournful wailings keep me company as we walk in wednesday morn the next two days' i told you so's give arguing an ear full every week thursday night's not enough sleep exhaustion sets the stage for friday's usual fighting and i am ready to promise again by saturday the house is all clean so you won't say i left it dirty pretend family sundays tell me that i am right this can't go on it just isn't fair and i know i have to do something soon monday is losing faith in tuesday... and tuesday is tired of dying [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 07-03-2000).] |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Sweetheart: You have to stop this circle dead in its tracks...it's no good for you....hark at me...lol...but I'm serious...it's a superb line "and tuesday is tired of dying" but you have the power to give Tuesday and YOU something to smile about...I know, I know... I just think you, well, we all, deserve more than just rattling through our days but maybe that's cause I rattled through a few myself.. Big HUSG |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
How well thought out can one poem be? Corazon, this is amazing writing...really. Perhaps someday you will be Wednesday's child  You're not a week person  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
a pick a fight with me friday starts the funeral cycle next comes the working really hard to stay away from you saturdays the house is clean and the pretend we are happy sundays and the monday morning as i get ready for work promise that i will leave on tuesday i can't take this anymore but the leaving never comes ------------------ and tuesdays starlight mournful wailings keep me company as we walk in wednesday morn the next two days' I told you so's give arguing an ear full every week thursday night's not enough sleep exhaustion sets the stage for friday's usual fighting and i am ready to promise again by saturday the house is all clean so you won't say i left it dirty sunday's pretend family tells me that i ... am right this can't go on it just isn't fair and i know i have to do something soon monday is losing faith in tuesday ... and tuesday is tired of dying ------------------------- *sitting here shaking my head in awe* and in the pleasure that come from reading poetry like this. this is So damn WELL written and expressed amazing girl..truly a classic .. take care, jm What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly ~LaoTzeTao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
rg....thanks lady and yep i know, changes are in the works *keep your fingers crossed with me* bal you always have a smile and nope you are right, i am not a week person....thank you for your compliments, at least my poems can be well thought out if nothing else janet...thank you, you always have the nicest compliments...glad you liked |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corazon, If you can write a poem like that, you will do what you have to do. *L* |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks seymore, and yep i think you are right, am getting stronger the more i write |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This is a truly awe-inspiring poem Corazon, I can't even pick uout the lines I liked, I liked them all... regards, sudhir |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
I'm sitting here with chills running up and down my spine and tears welling up in my eyes because i lived that weekly merry-go-round for years and i know exactly where you are right now which is not a fun place.... This is absolutely one of your very best pieces. Please don't change any of it.... Except the changing that needs to take place so that this poem is history.... Be well, my friend... listen to your heart and follow your plan. Thank you for a fabulous read! |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Please submit this for Voices. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
One of the great joys of our friendship has been watching your progression as a poet... from tentative to terrific! Yes, there are still things in your life that desperately need to be "fixed." But you're getting so damn good at articulating the problem... I'm just waiting for the day when we all rejoice in the solution. *S* Great job! |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
sudhir, thank you kind sir, you know i thought about you when i sat down to write this, as last week you were wondering where i came up with my ideas for poems....and lol, i don't know, maybe you and i can sit down and have a talk with my muse doreen thank you, your response means much to me, after i am left speechless by all of your poems, to know, that painfully, i hit this one right....well....you know what i mean, and yep am working on the history thing suthern....yeeeeeeehaaaaaaaah ...that's texan for boy is it good to see you girl and thank you your comments calm my spirit and put a finish on my poems thank you lady [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 07-03-2000).] |
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