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Too late can't sleep
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Too late can't sleep |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief 
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All that I did. All that I said wasted away memories blead. Reptile like skin on all I've been hiding this sin returns again. Doesn't matter now's not the time. Won't help me nothing's.......... .................... ..going........to........ ........................ .........stop................. $%@@#  ^$%&^*&(**%^&&*#%*#@$%"#$%#THE&$#&#%^&$#%^#SINS&%$# ^%&&*$#?#$OF#*#$^%(#^MAN#$%^%FROM^*&#$*^%$#&^$%&# HAUNTING#^%#@$^%#$$!@*$*$&^$(%^$^)^)%)^)%)^ $%#$MY^%&%#^&$%^$&%$%^&$SOUL%^&%^&%^&% ()*(_&*(%^&*#%^@~#@%#$%$^$&%^&%" < !signature--> There is something inside me and I know it's good, but understanding is misunderstood. [This message has been edited by Effigy (edited 06-12-2000).] |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
effigy I know the feeling of not being able to close my eyes, very good poem short and precise. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Quite the presentation Effigy! I guess we had to "read between the lines" for the finale! Sometimes we cannot take on all of life's burdens to ourselves ... it's just too tiring for one soul  Best wishes and sweet dreams, /Kit |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Insomnia, sleep, can't sleep, must sleep, Otherwise I never can reap, Don't make a peap, I just cannot sleep, This feeling, I'm feeling, I'm starting to sleeeeeeeep .... No there I go, I'm waking again, One thing to do, I'll pick up my pen, I'll write it in biro, I'll write it in ink, It gives me a chance, To stop slumbering, And think . - Sleep easy for tommorow's another day and you must take it and reap the benifits of sweet fulfillment, Carpe Diem ( sieze the day ) - L.of.L. Tom . Sweet dreams . Insanity is a perfectly normal responce to an abnormal world -R.D.Laing.- |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
effigy well done and love the different ending |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
I pleased that yall enjoyed this. It was kind of strange, just one of those late night rambels. I wasn't sure what kind of responce I'd get back on it. Anyways, thanks. Effigy After all, what is reality anyway? Nothin' but a collective hunch. |
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forne_marin Member
since 2004-04-13
Posts 140Spartanburg, South Carolina |
Okay, guilty admission. All the way through your poem I kept hearing your voice saying, "Can't sleep, clowns will eat me... Can't sleep, clowns will eat me... Can't sleep, clowns will eat me..." Maybe that's because I know you too well. Okay, first thing, "memories blead"--that should be "memories bleed". Secondly, I don't think you gave this poem enough credit. It's got a good rhyme scheme, good meter, good rhythm, and I like where you're taking it. I think you really cheapened the poem with that bizarre ending. |
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