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Sorrow's Liquid Light
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Sorrow's Liquid Light |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Surrendered. Now, I finally slept. I dreamt a dream of horses--white, like statues in a sacred mist, moonlight--sanctified. I wore a dress of gossamer. The stars were winking, knowing eyes... I felt a wetness on my cheek. Surprised, I knew, that joy, too, cries... A breeze of blue-- the wind swept through (whirl of silver clouds mind's eye) when then, the flood-- a scent of blood-- (sweat of night in day, reprised...) Horses--headless-- shank exposed, cutting, jagged, as a knife. Red-on-white-- no peace at night, and daytime will not be my home. Even through the depth of sleep, a massacre lay at my feet. Entrails of this majesty, dance in sorrow's liquid light... Too much--TOO MUCH--- for me to see... I don't know how to close eyes twice. A silent scream. I writhe awake. drowning in the sweat of sorrow. Awake, alive, to my chagrin-- aware-- that I must rest tomorrow. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
superb serenity. . . I could feel myself bathed in this light, you made it so real. . . excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I was swept away by this Serenity, you have woven a gem here!!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
in a sacred mist, moonlight--sanctified. I wore a dress of gossamer. The stars were winking, knowing eyes... I felt a wetness on my cheek. Surprised, I knew, that joy, too, cries... ---------------- a scent of blood-- (sweat of night in day, reprised...) ------------- no peace at night, and daytime will not be my home. Even through the depth of sleep, a massacre lay at my feet. ------------- in sorrow's liquid light... Too much--TOO MUCH--- for me to see... I don't know how to close eyes twice. A silent scream. to my chagrin-- aware-- that I must rest tomorrow. -------------- ya gotta stop eating that spicy gumbo before bed baby  my goodness...this started out so lovely ... and then went so ugly ... me thinks the painpills for that toothache aint working me twin ...  well, we can console our selves and say... its only a dream ...NOT...  feel better me sweet... dare i say sweet dreams ... just be glad ya get spared hearing me SING that lullaby... screeching cats do it better  night-poet-girlie girl me loves ya me you can say baby baby can I hold you tonite maybe if I said the right words at the right time you'd be mine baby can I hold you tonite Tracy C |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sven, thank you for your grace, me Sveetie.. Butterlies---a lovely surprise, (somehow butterflies always are...) and JANET MARIE....PAIN PILLS? Methinks you took them all...these are not the words of a person pain-free...lol...worry about me when I'm HAPPY...and if I should disappear altogether, don't even waste the boys on a posse'....Love ya much, even if you are a greedy twin with dental insurance... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thats exactly what i said me twin... they AINT working... and me at the dentist???? oh no baby...now theres pain... i'll take me chances with a poet and broken heart... you can have the dentist....lol (see why me muse leaves me) i never learn me thinks shes gone to stay of late  feel better me sweet *winkie winkie* me [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 06-30-2000).] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Even through the depth of sleep, a massacre lay at my feet. Entrails of this majesty, dance in sorrow's liquid light... Too much--TOO MUCH--- for me to see... I don't know how to close eyes twice. WOW that was very intense...ok I ma going to take a deep breath...and phew I am still stunned. nothing to say except amazing. "monuments put from pen to paper turns me into a gutless wonder" Manic street preachers |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
This one is excellent! I had to get it back up to the top! Oh! Did u like that one I left at the end of "U" for u. Thanks for the one u left. Anyway love this title too! "Sorrow's Liquid Light"  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
very intense poem...tremendous imagery...I hope you don't dream like that often. |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
as usual another stunging and inspiring poem, what an intense dream, you are lucky to have such a vivid chimera. Kindly, Redheart Angrybraids |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Well written. enjoyed the read. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You have GOT to stop eating those dill pickles before going to bed! This is really very beautiful. The scenes are majestically painted. Thank you... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ Wonderful writing, my friend. 'I felt a wetness on my cheek. Surprised, I knew, that joy, too, cries...' Awesome awareness ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
wanted to thank everyone--insect, brian, redheart, Mike, Martie and especially daddy Balladeer and mom Marge...I hug you all to my heart for your kindness...and Balladeer, from now on I'm sticking to the sweet pickles.... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I read this earlier and I couldn't find the words. They still escape me, so know that I am drawn to this one and it's vividness. Great read!!!1 |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
not that i'm some one who declares luckyness royalty's. i read it again, of course and it's so vivid, i love the expalination of the dress, and the stars, Kindly, Redheart Angrybraids |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
not that i'm some one who declares luckyness royalty's. i read it again, of course and it's so vivid, i love the expalination of the dress, and the stars, Kindly, Redheart Angrybraids |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Not to worry dear Serenity. Your Knight and White horse has not died. Just taken a break from reality. Great Writing Keep it up. Rich [This message has been edited by spiked (edited 07-06-2000).] |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
This certainly started out enchanting! Only to wake and sweat and have the hell scared out of you. Whoa man! You've woven it wonderfully serenity! I'm really glad you shared this with me! <*\\\>< The will of God will never lead you, where the grace of God cannot keep you. |
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DiscordantNote New Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 9Texas |
I love this. It is vaguely reminiscent of Poe. Not the wording, perhaps, but the mindset. A bit like Lewis Carroll, as well. Very well conceived, and written. "Things get complicated when you get past eighteen, and the further past eighteen you get... the more complicated they become". |
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