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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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July. White curtains. Melancholy. The stale air is hard to breathe. Alone I sit and stare at Holly, Who’s doing homework, while I grieve. Two weeks remaining. Birds are chirping. It’s four a.m. I’m counting sheep. Is it my conscience-- so disturbing? My eyes are red from lack of sleep. Spread fingers hold the heavy Norton*. Her other hand is on her lips. While I am left to die from boredom. Outside, the pale sunrise creeps. The sun will rise before we know it This day will be consumed by time. But, until then, let’s steal a moment From lifeless verse and boring rhyme. I strain my eyes from lack of sleep July. White curtains. Melancholy. Four twenty-five. I’m counting sheep Alone I sit and stare at Holly. *Norton Anthalogy of Poetry |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
great master...even though the simple idea of this piece it remains thought provoking. it flows nicely and ends as it begins (i like that)... salooma |
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SweetPoet17 Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 108 |
That was a very beautiful poem. -jessica- |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Whoa. Very nice. Good flow, good poem. keep it up Bel |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
That was such an awsome poem! Lauren |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you all! I'm glad you liked it! |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Master: As I haven't been in here for quite some time, I am quite happy that your piece was the first one that I came across. Your work has always been brilliant and this piece is no exception. The way in which it was written was great and the ending and the start were the same which promoted, to me, creativity and originality. Nice work. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I have to lock this post, because it is also posted in Open. If you have any questions, feel free to e-mail me. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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