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Lone Insomniac Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 45 |
The Deserts Ruby As the desert sands slips through my hand I wonder what I’m doing here I left it all for this homeless land Whirlwinds of dust is all I can hear I’m seeking truth and a caravan of fire I wished I was the only one alive The deserts ruby of beauty and desire The ship of the worlds that I ride Since I travelled so far into this place I cannot wait to see your precious face Touch your tears with my love I hold your fear, it’s never enough I raise my blade and face all death The blackened clouds fill the sky The monster is trapped since we met One thing is sure, I will die A storm enlights this furious rage Frightens the people of this town My fear is now locked in a cage Nothing to think about just take it down Dune by dune I wander through the wasteland of my life Nothing grows, no more youth Only the chilling cold of the night Illusions just make me ill And now I’ll lose it all A mirror is closed by my fathers will Nothing left to fight, I’ll just fall I see the blood through the though Finally I’m able to see Holding the one who I love Here it ends, but I begin, I am free.... Since I travelled so far into this place I cannot wait to see your precious face Touch your tears with my love I hold your fear, it’s never enough |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Lone Insomniac: This is the kind of piece that I look forward to reading after a long period of no poetry. The whole theme of the poem was deep and I particulary liked this verse: "I see the blood through the though Finally I’m able to see Holding the one who I love Here it ends, but I begin, I am free...." I found it really interesting in that you are finally seeing into the distance and you are becoming free from the terror that has got you trapped. Great writing. Something to be proud of. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Very creative piece, it really put pictures in my mind. Great work  |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
"I’m seeking truth and a caravan of fire I wished I was the only one alive The deserts ruby of beauty and desire The ship of the worlds that I ride" very nice selection of words you've penned. i loved this!! Salooma |
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