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My Un-Forgotten Past
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My Un-Forgotten Past |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ 
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Why did you do what you did when we were one? Why did you say that our love was nothing but games and fun? Why cant it be the way it was before? Why did you do it? cuz you knew I would keep coming back for more? You played with my feelings along with my head. Thinking you loved me I believed every word you said. You made me look like a fool as I lost all my pride. And all I did was sit around think about you and cry. Now what I think is I'm glad it didnt last. You are only a memory fading quickly into the past. ~No one is worth your tears, and the one who is wont make you cry~ ~We all cant be stars but we all can twinkle~ [This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 08-08-2000).] |
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Misty Blue Junior Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 44 |
Hi! I really feel you on this one.It seems like I can always relate to your poems in a different way.Stay Tru |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
You feelings are always well put in your poems, keep up the awesome work  |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
MISTYBLUE~~~thanks for the reply...we can all relate to each others poems one way or another... Lakewalker~~~thanks for you reply...im glad that you liked it..< !signature--> ~No one is worth your tears, and the one who is wont make you cry~ ~We all cant be stars but we all can twinkle~ [This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 08-08-2000).] |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
wow erin, another great post of yours! i love those words... "Now what I think is I'm glad it didnt last. You are only a memory fading quickly into the past." Keep em coming and if ya ever need to chat..feel totally free to email me. salooma |
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SweetPoet17 Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 108 |
I feel you totally... You go girl! -jessica- |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Nice post. It sounds so authentic and deep. It flows very well and I agree with Salooma, those last lines are perfect. ,._-=-~^* Jeremy *^~-=-_., |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
salooma, sweetpoet, jeremy~~~im glad that yous liked it...thanks for the replies!!! ~No one is worth your tears, and the one who is wont make you cry~ ~We all cant be stars but we all can twinkle~ |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
I really liked the last stanza....you should be proud. I hope this isn't about the guy you've been seeing....that would really suck. Anywho....if ya need to talk you know how to reach me. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
jeremy~~~no this isnt about the guy i am with now...its about my ex...there was a party this weekend and he was there and we got into a fight...he was playing around with me and i took it seriously...and i started yelling at him...ill tell you all about it later... ~No one is worth your tears, and the one who is wont make you cry~ ~We all cant be stars but we all can twinkle~ |
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LIL.MAMA Junior Member
since 2000-06-26
Posts 32 |
ERIN NOTHER GREAT POEM KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!! THAT POEM SOUNDS LIKE HOW I FELT ABOUT DAN!! KEEP IT UP GIRL YOUR DOING GREAT!!! |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Hey babe! Now this was what i was talking about when I said i loved your work. This like sooo sounds like a page out of my diary. and i really liked the title. keep up the great work! i wanna read more ~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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