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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733
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Hey Everyone, I am not sure where this came from. I wrote it in just a few minutes, so it probably won't be one of my best ones. Please tell me what ya think, feel free to rip it apart. Thanks! Bel A Girl She looks into the mirror and sees A girl Pale skin and dark eyes Staring back No use for make up Skin is too pale Her dark hair surrounds her Like a mourning veil Her smooth skin Is milky white No sign of a tan Anywhere in sight Her crimson lips Are in dazzling contrast Her white teeth Straight at last Her slim wrists Arms with a slightly odd tint Small hands And long fingers bent Sharp collar bone Showing through She can count her ribs Sticking out too She stares at this figure How can this be She asks herself Is this me? |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
HEY! This was a very good poem..even at the spur of the moment. And i hope this isn't about you!! But if it is...oh i dont know what to say. Cause i use to be anorexic and in the end its just not worth it. You'll be so much happier after you've overcome it! I promise..keep your chin up =) "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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SweetPoet17 Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 108 |
That was incredible, very good. I used to be bulimic and many people think I am beginning to become bulimic again although I am not... because I have been going through alot lately, I hope this isnt about you, but if it is please get help... you could die, or if its about someone you know, reach out, make a call... Eating disorders go on detected for years, mine did. *SweetPoet* |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hey- thanks so much for your concern! I really appreciate it. Yes, this is basically about me. Well, thanks again Bel |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Great poem. It kind of reminds me of the theme of Mulan the Disney movie. The song is "Reflection". I have that song right next to my mirror, and I think that it is very true. Just keep your head up. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "True love last forever" |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Very descriptive. You allowed us to see the perfect picture of this person, all her insecurities and fears. Can't wait to see more! Thomas A. Plemmons  "I could have missed the pain But I'd of had to miss The Dance" -Garth Brooks- |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Great poem....but it doesn't seems to be too much about a girl who's anerexic...kinda seems to me about a girl who doesn't know who she is anymore even if she looks in the mirror. I could be totally off but that's how I've felt before. Great job and keep em coming! Salooma |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
"Her dark hair surrounds her Like a mourning veil" That caught my eye immediately. This is one of your better anorexia pieces, Bel. You go through the description of the person rather than what the disease does to their mind. You have some wonderful images in this and it is definitely one to be proud of. Thanks for sharing and keep writing. ~AF~ "Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?" |
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