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Manequin |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg 
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You cast away, with dirty hands, without a second thought, A Manequin, who cannot smile, with all the toys you've bought He may be limp, emotionless, and mute, above it all, but he has ears to hear you with if you should ever call He's cold and unintelligent, this manequin of yours He lives within the catacombs he, hours on end, explores You tell him that you love him and he does not believe the manequin hopes that, someday, you will let him leave And you know that you often hope that he would disappear because in his plastic eyes you see a wisdom that you fear [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 01-04-2001).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
 Welcome to Passions This is an excellent first post here, it's so meaningful. I hope you like it here and post some more for all of us to read  "He lives within the catacombs he, hours on end, explores" "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Thanks for the reply, Lakewalker. This forum is, indeed, a breath of fresh air after searching so long for a decent poetry forum. It is nice to be here, and I will make this a regular stop on my net-surfing schedule. Once again, thanks for the praise! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Allan, great job on this one. Another lively perspective on the views of the way one may look at a manequin, and especially how a manequin might look at us. If there is any deeper meaning, please do explain. I am quite interested in this poem...  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Actually DD, the Manequin represents my life of isolation, and my feelings toward my parents as I grew up. Thanks for your interest. |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Welcome Great poem allen. I really enjoyed it. Look forward to more from you Jason "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Welcome to Passions! This is a wonderful first post, and I can definently feel and relate to the deeper meaning in this one. I hope that in coming here and making friends that you reduce your isolation. PS-check your e-mail "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Welcome to Passions! That was a great first post, and I know that you will have a great time and be totally accepted here!  Things get a little weird here (read 'Bathroom aroma'  ), but that's to be expected. Can't wait to read more of your work!~*Rhonda "I am Canadian" - Joe If you set limitations upon yourself, it's no wonder you fall short of your dreams - Rhonda J. Adolph |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
first off, you're gonna find this forum incredibly friendly! wow, what an awesome poem and so deep with meaning too! i hope you enjoy your self here best wishes ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
I completely loved it!! This was very thought-provoking, gotta love it when stuff makes me think. I can't wait for more!! ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Welcome to our humble home! Great poem, keep giving them to us! You're going to love it here. xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS! Your definately gonna love it here just like the rest of us. Your a very talented poet and i cant wait to see more of your poems. Keep em comin. Welcome again! |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Excellent poem... you write sooo well, I look forward to reading more!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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kimmy Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 98 |
welcome to passions..this was a great first post...im glad u decided to join...i hope to read more soon.. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i agree with "child of the stars" don't you just love it when your intelligence is being tested i love poems that make my heart skip a beat But most of all, i love poems that make me think, i just hate the reading over and over and over part  thanks for the wonderful read I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
  WeLcOmE tO pAsSiOnS [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 09-01-2001).] |
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