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IsGona
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since 2000-07-14
Posts 723


0 posted 2000-08-01 11:38 PM


It's hard to find the Rythenm to this one but if you do it reads like a song.  Enjoy...

aint nothing working
aint nothing right
there's a hole in me
that I can't fill
no matter how hard I try

aint nothin sweeter
aint nothing wrong
the pain that I recieve
keeps me strong
it keeps me moving on

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN"
~Hatebreed~

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Alwye
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In the space between moments
1 posted 2000-08-02 12:51 PM


A certain amount of pain does keep one strong...very well done!  

*Krista Knutson*

"You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back."
-Barbara DeAngelis

TopGunLauren
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since 2000-08-02
Posts 718
California
2 posted 2000-08-02 02:44 AM


  I know what you mean about pain I go through a lot of it every day but everntually it should get better.
Salooma
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

3 posted 2000-08-02 10:31 AM


great song/poem. it's very nice...i guess i could kinda get the rythem to it sorta. but your words are absoulutly true and that's what makes it such a great piece.

salooma

IsGona
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since 2000-07-14
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4 posted 2000-08-02 03:18 PM


Thank you all  

Alwye ~ That's so true, and at this rate I will be the strongest man ever

TopGunLauren ~ we all Have times when the pain feels over-whelming but your right it does get better

Salooma ~ Thank you so much.  Unless you heard it read once it is heard to hear the rythem but I am so glad you enjoyed



"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN"
~Hatebreed~

Tara
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since 2000-02-21
Posts 76
Minnesota
5 posted 2000-08-02 04:56 PM


Hey I really liked this one.  I could kinda feel the rhythm.  Do you ever write songs too?  Or just poetry?  Just wondering.  Keep up the good work.....Tara
Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

6 posted 2000-08-03 02:13 PM


Very nice.  I liked this one.  Keep writing
Bel

IsGona
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since 2000-07-14
Posts 723

7 posted 2001-05-14 12:33 PM


I just like to say... I broke many rules here.  Well only one but a big one.  I didn't write this, but I just really wanted to share it... so if a mod reads this I'm sorry but could you please delete this I regret posting it.
Jason

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