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TearsOfPearls
Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa

0 posted 2000-07-30 03:43 PM

Please stop and stand still,
I can't go on no more,
I can't keep it together
like those times before.

Please give these frozen tears
a chance to melt in the sun,
to pour over my thirsty soul
that can no longer run.

Just stop for one moment
so peace can find my heart,
ease these feelings choking me,
make the heeling start.

To pause for one moment
is what I ask from you.
To stand still for one second,
is that so hard to do?

You look at me, laught out loud:
"It's your struggle against fate,
life goes on, it never stops,
this world won't wait!"

This world won't wait...

Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach.

mr0001
Junior Member

since 2000-06-09

Posts 39

1 posted 2000-07-30 03:47 PM

oh my goodness...this is one of the best poems i have read in a long time. granted, there are some grammatical errors, but i've never been one to care much about that stuff. excellent poem...

mr

"crazy" is just who you are...amplified.

some people draw the outlines in life, i chose to add the color.

LyricFetish
Senior Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 528
North Carolina

2 posted 2000-07-30 03:49 PM

Very powerful poem, with excellent describtion. I like it a lot!! Peace out chick.

*~Meredith~*

If I could read your mind,
What would you say?
Would it take my breath away?
*Human

TearsOfPearls
Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa

3 posted 2000-07-30 04:10 PM

Thanks you guys

I appreciate it.

I wrote this poem after visiting my friend's mom for the first time after her death. It's been four months and she's taking it very badly.

She inspired me, but I don't think I'll show her this, cause I think it will only make her feel worse.

Thanks again for the positive feedback mr0001 and Meredith

Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach.

Kittie
Member

since 2000-07-08

Posts 103

4 posted 2000-07-30 04:17 PM

WOW!! Strong feelings and very well put together; the rhyme works really well. I really can't say how wonderful of a poem this is, just keep your head up and keep up the great work!
Kittie

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

5 posted 2000-07-30 04:18 PM

i am sorry to hear about your friend...you wrote a really good poem though...keep up the good work girl...if you ever wanna chat email me...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

Tara
Member

since 2000-02-21

Posts 76
Minnesota

6 posted 2000-07-30 05:53 PM

I really enjoyed this poem. I think it is the saddest things that inspire the best poetry. But I guess i'm attracted to that kind of work. Anyway, the poem was wonderful and keep up the good work. Tara

Lovely_Kris
Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 176

7 posted 2000-07-30 07:24 PM

what a wounderful poem and I think this poem is great. Im sorry to hear about your friend. I hope things get better for you and your friend's mom. Hope to read more.
Lovely_Kris

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