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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Millions of tiny pieces floating around in a flood Floating and lost in this relentless pool of blood No bruises, no cuts, or wounds can be found It was just a game-all he did was push her around So now things were complicated,he didn't know what to do He was really very sorry, but this she already knew She'd heard it all before"It would never happen again." All she did was laugh and say"that's what you told Jen" Tired and hurting, she set out to find somebody new So now it was he, who was left cold and blue... < !signature--> *~* I wIsH I wAs A LiTTlE gIrL aGaIn; SkInNeD kNeEs AnD bRuIsEd ElBoWs ArE eAsIeR tO hEaL tHaN a BrOkEn HeArT!*~* [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 07-20-2000).] |
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TrueLUV Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158Connecticut, U.S.A. |
Well then he got what he deserved guys can be idiots sometime and just not realize whats there until its gone. Great piece hope to read many more TrueLUV  [This message has been edited by TrueLUV (edited 07-20-2000).] |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
Wow!!! What a great poem. It expressed a lot of emotions, I'm glad that she told him to get lost and looked for someone new. With guys like that, it's all you can do. The only bad thing is that she had to get hurt in the first place. Your poem is really great and I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Love Always, Shell. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Great writing StarPryncess! This was an emotional piece. No one deserves to be treated in this way ...I'm so glad this person was sent packing. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
I really like this poem -- great post. When a door closes, another door of oppurtunity opens. The only problem is that most of us are so busy looking at the closed door that we fail to see |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Hey Jess, great piece. I really enjoyed reading it. Keep up the good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "Always do your best, you will always succeed" |
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Fairy Princess Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 64Fitchburg Ma, USA |
Good Job Jess! Your poem is good it shows your feelings. ~*~The Fairy Princess~*~ ~*~What you see is what you get~*~ |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Very good writing here. I've never been in an abusive relationship, but I'm very sorry you had to go through it. Great poem! *~Meredith~* It's so obvious That the promise Keeps me here Painting pictures where All the colors Disappear *Lit |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
well jessica its about time that you started posting again...its been so long since i read a poem by you...i have a friend that was in this situation at one point...and she did what this person did...got rid of the guy... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
What can I say. You always write poems that I always love to read. And yes, it's been a while since your last post  Keep posting Jessica |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Sooo glad to see you back!!! This is a good poem. This happened to me once when my ex, had this littled game she liked to play called screw around with Jasons head. Well, I'm a very smart boy and quite good at that game myself. Now, (cause she left me,) She calls me when her new @$$hole hurts her like she did to me. It bothers me because I care about her but what goes around comes around; right? Anyway, keep them coming babe! And be strong. May the force be with you and so will I. Luv ya lots jason  |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
oh my dear friends, it has been a while since I have posted...  I've been very busy, but done the best I can to still reply as much as possible; hope you're all not too disappointed in me!  well, I am happy to report that this poem isn't about me! This poem pretty much came out of nowhere...well, actually I was watching this movie about this topic so I just thought I would sum up the movie in a short verse. It wasn't much and definately wasn't as deep as some of my other pieces. oh wellers! well to those of you who are newer....I'm glad you seem to be enjoying the forum! I have been here for almost 2 months and enjoyed every second of it. This is my quiet place to go and get away from evreyday life. well I just wanted to say thank you al very much for replying! talk to ya soon!! ~*~Jess~*~*~* I wIsH I wAs A LiTTlE gIrL aGaIn; SkInNeD kNeEs AnD bRuIsEd ElBoWs ArE eAsIeR tO hEaL tHaN a BrOkEn HeArT!*~* |
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BabyGirl1 Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 91Morris, IL |
This is a very good poem. It is also very sad that this happens every day to millions of people who do not deserve it. I really enjoy the ending. The last line gives it such a good twist "We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can fly only by embracing each other." -Luciano de Crescenzo- |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
I feel cool....I know what this is aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaallllllllllllllll about....aren't I special... Well, at least your being strong. You didn't do a bad job of putting it on paper either. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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cutie2005 Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 148Bennett, Colorado USA |
great poem i loved it... And he did deserve it!!! Love ya, cutie |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
Jen, this is a very nice poem. It's been a long time since I've read one of your poems. Where have you been? It's good to see you again |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Hey everyone, thanks for your replies!! BabyGirl~thanks for the kind words! I'm glad you liked it.and you're right it is very sad about this all happening. Jeremy~ hey hun, not quite sure what ya mean but you knowing what this is all about!?!?! This isn't about me! silly! but it's ok b/c, I still love ya! hehe. Cutie~well, he did deserve it...all guys who do this do! I'm glad you liked the poem! thanks for your reply. Jose~well, I guess it has been a while considering the fact that you forgot my name! lol. For some reason everybody feels compelled to call me Jen or Jennifer....not quite sure why, but everyone does it so don't feel bad. lol. well I've been busy...very busy, but I'm back as much as I can be now so we'll see what happens!It's good to see you too!! thank you all for your wonderful replies! It's good to be back! Missed you all terribly!! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ *~* I wIsH I wAs A LiTTlE gIrL aGaIn; SkInNeD kNeEs AnD bRuIsEd ElBoWs ArE eAsIeR tO hEaL tHaN a BrOkEn HeArT!*~* |
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Le Capitan de L'Amour Member
since 2000-07-15
Posts 60 |
ooh la la! that was wonderfull thank you for replying to my poem I hope we could chat in a later occation mon ami.au revouir! |
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sherm Member
since 2000-07-21
Posts 94Evansville,IN |
cool poem it really shows how little some people can care about others |
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Vball Chickie1624 Member
since 2000-05-14
Posts 116New York |
Great poem. I know what this is all about, been there before. Keep writing and good luck!! Love ya Danielle It takes a minute to get a crush on someone, an hour to like them, a day to love them, and a lifetime to forget them. Dedicated to: MD |
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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
Very thought provoking, and full of feeling, one of those poems that stick in your head.. "Controlling my feelings for too long.... And forcing our darkest souls to unfold... And pushing us into self-destruction...." *~Muse*~ |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Thank you all for your replies! I honestly didn't think I would get much feedback on this one, it wasn't like my usual style. Le Capitan~Thank you so much! I hope so too! Sherm~ sad isn't it?  Too many people in this world take advantage of eachother. Danielle~ I'm so sorry that you've had to feel this pain! I hope you're doing better now though! Lani~Thanks, I'm glad that you liked it! *~* I wIsH I wAs A LiTTlE gIrL aGaIn; SkInNeD kNeEs AnD bRuIsEd ElBoWs ArE eAsIeR tO hEaL tHaN a BrOkEn HeArT!*~* |
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Rachel8383 Junior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 44 |
great poem, keep it up, he deserved it. *Rach* |
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Gregory Junior Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 22Philadelphia, Pennsylvania, United States |
Good Job Rachael..That poem was great, that guy was a real jerk! Keep up the good work!  |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
thats pathetic and painful. ultimately both of them ended up in pain and look for romances outside them.if they would have reached a connection things would be a lot different. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Thanks you guys!! You're soo sweet! Rachel, thanks, I'm glad you liked it. While this character was fictional, he did deserve what he got. Thanks for the kind words!! Gregory, ok so I'm not Rachel, but I will take the credit for writing the piece. Thanks for the kind words. A_L, Praise to the insightful pone around here! But if him beating her was the only way they could connect, why should she submit herself that that pain? Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. Love you all!! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ *~* I wIsH I wAs A LiTTlE gIrL aGaIn; SkInNeD kNeEs AnD bRuIsEd ElBoWs ArE eAsIeR tO hEaL tHaN a BrOkEn HeArT!*~* |
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Lovely_Kris Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176 |
I really like this poem. I think you did a great job and thanks for sharing this poem. I hope you keep up the great work. When i read this poem i it sounded so real. Lovely_Kris |
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FoxyGirl Junior Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 17 |
That was a really great poem. thanx for sharing it with all of us. I really enjoyed it. keep up the great work. Jenn |
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FairyPrincess Junior Member
since 2000-07-26
Posts 25 |
That was a really great poem. he deserved what he got. I look forward to reading more of your poems. Keep up the good work. *Jess* |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
sorry Jessica, I didn't mean to call you Jen, I guess I just wasn't thinking. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Thanks for replying you guys!! it means a lot! *~* I wIsH I wAs A LiTTlE gIrL aGaIn; SkInNeD kNeEs AnD bRuIsEd ElBoWs ArE eAsIeR tO hEaL tHaN a BrOkEn HeArT!*~* |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
hey! GREAT poem i love the raw emotion in it. if only all girls were that strong to move on after something like that. keep writing! ~!*DancinQueen*!~ |
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Enchanted Star Junior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 14New Port Richey, FL |
I liked it...it was sad and emotional. It reminded me of a friend I have. She went through it too. CindyLuC |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
WOW! everytime I turn around, I find I have a new reply!! Thanks guys! This poem isn't really that wonderful, but I am glad you all like it. Thanks for the replies, and welcome to the few new people that we seem to find ourselves dealing with everyday!! Enjoy! Love You all! *hugs and kisses*Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~ *~* I wIsH I wAs A LiTTlE gIrL aGaIn; SkInNeD kNeEs AnD bRuIsEd ElBoWs ArE eAsIeR tO hEaL tHaN a BrOkEn HeArT!*~* |
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