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The_Driven
Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 60

0 posted 2000-07-20 02:32 AM

AUTHOR'S NOTE: This poem was written straight from my head, so it's kind of erratic when you read it, but please bear with it.

"The most ongoing, and complex war...
is the war fought within one's own self."

Unbidden,
thousands of thoughts, some bad, and others worse,
force their way into my mind on a quiet day.

Onslaughts,
of varied images, at any given time.
Some that fill me with horror, and others with mere disdain.

Distracting,
are these dread images, and essences, of things be it past, present or fantasy.
Which break what was once focused, and send it scattering each, and every way.

Random,
in their order, which put my mind, through a never-ending torture.
They take what was once pleasant, and turn it to an image of emotional pain.

I can't do what negative things i think, for fear of hurting others.
Yet, i can't think what negative things i want to do, for fear of hurting myself.

They grow inside my mind,
with but a second.
Once just little tinges of spite,
turned into another world
of stomach wrenching contortion, and confusion.

Now with most diseases theres a cure,
to purge this corruption from my mind for sure.
Positive thinking is the way,
so happiness can win another day.

And now, when all thoughts, and courses,
both good, and bad, have been run,
I'm left with only dumbfounded confusion, and finally...
My poem is done.

(This poem may have been a little offbeat, but thats how i think sometimes, as you can tell)

Chel
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA

1 posted 2000-07-20 07:16 AM

Hey there,
I liked the poem and it didn't matter how it was read. It was really good. Keep up the good work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"Always do your best, you will always succeed"

HerMelness
Junior Member

since 2000-07-12

Posts 37
Bridgewater, NS, Canada

2 posted 2000-07-20 09:25 AM

I really enjoyed this.. it feels like you just sat down and wrote what came first.. which is what's inside of you. Its important to write these, they show whats in your heart.. =)
~mel~

-Wherever you go, go with all your heart.-

Jacman
Member

since 2000-06-27

Posts 291
Dwight Il, US

3 posted 2000-07-20 11:46 AM

This was really great. Finally someone who thinks like me. They would put me in an institute if they could read my mind.

jason

StarPryncess17
Senior Member

since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

4 posted 2000-07-21 12:30 PM

I must agree, I too enjoyed this poem!! It was very descriptive and as for the way you think it's unique to you and no one will ever be able to think the same exact way...although some may come close. Anyways, I'm with Jason here, I would be in an institute if they could read my mind too.

Great work!! Keep it up! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

*~* I wIsH I wAs A LiTTlE gIrL aGaIn; SkInNeD kNeEs AnD bRuIsEd ElBoWs ArE eAsIeR tO hEaL tHaN a BrOkEn HeArT!*~*

Jose Marti
Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 374
washing DC

5 posted 2000-07-22 12:44 PM

Nice poem Barry. I enjoyed reading it.

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

6 posted 2007-12-02 08:27 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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