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The Monster |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
I had a dream, in this dream I stood With a young boy at the edge of a wooded acre "He's here," he said, "Who is?" I asked He took my hand and we walked together " The Monster, " he replied,then fell silent in fear The grip on my hand tightened I looked at him, eyes full of tears But could not understand why he was so frightened I turned away, then turned back again And much to my surprise The boy was older, still holding my hand The same fear in his eyes "He's here," he said, "Who is?" I asked Then asked him once again He answered not, simply led me on Still grasping firm my hand A little further, he'd grown again Into a sixteen-year-old young man "He's here," he whispered softly I asked him who again "The Monster,"he said, still so afraid And yet he led me on I oblivious to this demon Did not know what was wrong Then finally the forest cleared I looked and to my surprise A man stood in front of me With that little boy in his eyes He let go my hand and walked away It was then I saw That boy was me, I am the man, the forest "growing up" And I "The Monster" of it all Afterthought: Sometimes we lose that little boy or little girl inside When we grow up so fast like so many do these days We kill childhood with responsibility And that little boy or girl never gets to come out and play -Thomas A. Plemmons< !signature--> "I could have missed the pain But I'd of had to miss The Dance" -Garth Brooks- [This message has been edited by TAP2 (edited 07-12-2000).] |
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Kittie Member
since 2000-07-08
Posts 103 |
This was really great, I really liked it. I feel as though I've grown up too fast, and so do my parents, so.. This poem really touched me. I like it a lot, keep up the great work! Kittie |
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Snickers Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88East Haddam, CT |
Thomas, I'm beginning to run out of adjectives for u'r work!  For this one, lets go with remarkable. The message u conveyed iz so true, and I can totally relate. Growing up iz something that has to be done, although some aren't as anxious to do it as others. When u grow up too quickly, it's easy to get overwhelmed. But the experiences of life and growing up only make u stronger. Although the struggle can be a "monster" u've got to overcome it. ~<3 Alwayz~ **Nikki** ~*~*~*~*"We can complain because roses have thorns, or we can rejoice because thorns have roses." *~*~*~*~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent work Thomas! The story flowed beautifully from beginning to end. Much enjoyed this I did! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Well Tom, I must say...this is the probably the most creative and interesting theme I've read in here. Also, I'd like you to know that if nothing else in life, you can feel assured that you are very strong and are beating the monster. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
You need to put all of your work togethor, and run, not walk, but run to a publishing company. I believe that you have a greater gift here than with your music. And by the way since I've blocked out most of my childhood I live it now. So instead of a normal 20 year old, I am a responsible, hard working, angry, depressed, four year old. That pretty much covers it. Later jason  |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
i am amazed with your work...you have a talent that i wish i could have...you are one of the best writers who work i have ever read...keep up the good work...i am becoming quite a fan of yours...you got my vote... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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BabyGirl1 Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 91Morris, IL |
This is one of my favorite poems of yours. I love it. It is so true and honest. I feel at times as if I have lost a lot of my childhood, but you always seem to bring that little girl out of me! Thank you. Love always, BabyGirl1 "We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can fly only by embracing each other." -Luciano de Crescenzo- |
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April Resi Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 119Alabama |
Oh wow. You have no idea how close to home this hits. Everyone always said I was a very mature kid and now I'm finding out all the draw backs, as everyone expects me to be so mature all the time. It's no fun someimes and I wish I could've had more time playing like a normal kid than I did. I really loved the poem and I think it is the best I've ever read from you...which I saying a great deal because I love everything you write! April |
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The_Driven Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 60 |
I completely agree that we kill childhood with responsibility, and that most ids grow up too fast. I also enjoyed how you said that in your poem. Very good job! |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
This is really, very, totally, extremely, awesomely, completely, omigodly sensational!! You've inspired the use of my entire vocabulary to tell you what I think. Awesome theme, well-written, very true. You rock, my friend. Be cool. *~Meredith~* It's so obvious That the promise Keeps me here Painting pictures where All the colors Disappear *Lit |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Thomas! this one was simply wonderful!! you have such a way with words!!! The way you worded it all was excellent. And I must say that you are right, I too, have lost the little girl inside trying to "grow up" so fast! Of course, 16 probably isn't too too late to go back and maybe find the lil jessica again, who knows. anyways, magnificent work!! LOVED IT! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~My fire is dead,it knew no pain; yet it is dead and I remain: All stiff with ice ashes lie;and they are dead, and I will die~*~ |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
You all have no idea how much I appreciate you compliments. When I wrote this one I was afraid it was to grim. I am awestruck by your words of praise for words that are only my lowly, pauper's thoughts. You'll never know how much you mean to me personally. Thomas A. Plemmons "I could have missed the pain But I'd of had to miss The Dance" -Garth Brooks- |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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