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For a Day |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A 
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I know this is one of my more simpleton writings, but the story is very dear to me. For A Day Sliding by, month by month, over a year has passed. Barely making it through each day, memories are all that last. I'd fallen to depth below the lowest I could be. I then woke up just long enough to call her finally. The honey in her voice unchanged. Her her words still just as kind as the day so long ago that I'd left her far behind. As she granted my wish and allowed me to come and see her face, the ice that once had been my blood started again to race. My eyes could open and see the road. My heart could pound so free. Relief and excitement soaked right though my soul and agony. Minute by minute, mile by mile, I drove that road again. The angst was truly something I thought may never find it's end. But alas, the door was mine, and in her's I found a way to escape the world of solitude and smile just for a day. Jeremy D. Halstead 7/12/00 "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." [This message has been edited by Jeremy Halstead (edited 07-12-2000).] |
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EroseGrover Junior Member
since 2000-07-09
Posts 44SD,CA 92126 |
That is a very good poem Jeremey!I hope to see more of your work and this poem has my vote for the book!! ~EroseGrover~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Jeremy ... simple is sometimes exquisite ... and this is so, for this lovely poem. Wonderful work! Best wishes, /Kit |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
She is still there, isn't she? You two were wonderful together, and I've never seen you happier. Sometimes the mistakes we make can never be undone. But, alas, we are but human. If she can still move and effect you this much, perhaps another try is in order? You'll never know unless you explore the possibility. Great poem by the way. didn't find it at all too simplistic. Thomas "I could have missed the pain But I'd of had to miss The Dance" -Garth Brooks- |
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Snickers Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88East Haddam, CT |
As alwayz, impressive work. I don't think there's one piece of yours that I haven't utterly enjoyed. You have true talent, and you continue to use it well. ~<3 Alwayz~ **Nikki** ~*~*~*~*"We can complain because roses have thorns, or we can rejoice because thorns have roses." *~*~*~*~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
jeremy what can i say??? you amaze me more and more with every poem that i read of yours...i think that this is my favorite poem by you...how come i havent seen you on in awhile??? i get bored when im on at 3a.m. and your not on anymore...why not??? ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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BabyGirl1 Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 91Morris, IL |
Loved the poem. this one brought up a lot of memories too! (If its about who I think it is) You two were great together. "We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can fly only by embracing each other." -Luciano de Crescenzo- |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
very smooth. i found the only thing simple about this was the rhythm, and that's always a very good thing! an easy flow on this one. with a very unsimple subject. the angst and love of the heart are age-old teen anthems that are constantly rewritten. and you have done so in style. i like this one a lot. you talent is impressive. We all got our demons. We all got somethin' to atone for. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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