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CLBinLOVE
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 147
Hilton Head, SC, USA

0 posted 2000-07-11 01:19 AM



it eludes those who wait for it
it teases those who yearn
when you least expect it
its present you will earn

once you have entered
your imagination leads the way
your fears dreams and thoughts
are no longer kept at bay

it recharges, and cleanses
the body mind and soul
and we need it every night
if we are to grow old

it pushes back insanity
like laughter in a way
it releaves stress and pain
and keeps us sane day to day

it can tell the future
atleast for some people it can
they can dream of an accident with such precision
that they can find someone from the lisence plate of a van

it is highly addictive
withdrawlal is certain death
many cannot live without it
so on it depends your every breath

it can be thicker than any fog
and as heavy as lead
or as light as mountain air
and as heavy as the pillows on your bed

what is it?



always follow your heart, never follow others unless it is truely where you want to go, and never give up a dream, maybe just set it aside for a while... :)

© Copyright 2000 Craig Baker - All Rights Reserved
Ethan Halo
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since 2000-04-28
Posts 793
on the roof again
1 posted 2000-07-11 03:04 AM


very well penned riddle. quite a rhythm it has and good analogies. i liked the ones at the end a lot.
one word came to mind: sleep

just a "stab in the dark". =)

We all got our demons.
We all got somethin' to atone for.

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
2 posted 2000-07-11 04:17 AM


you made this riddle into a poem...i liked that...so whats the answer??? i give up...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

Jenabou
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since 2000-06-13
Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA
3 posted 2000-07-11 09:51 AM


great idea.......turning a riddle into a poem
i loved it
and is the answer "love"?!?!?


~The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too.~
**Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a harder bat

Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
4 posted 2000-07-11 10:03 AM


Very interesting.  The answer....I have no clue.  I liked it though.  Keep up the good work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"Always do your best, you will always succeed"

LyricFetish
Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
5 posted 2000-07-11 01:50 PM


Really cool idea, good job. I'm going to with Ethan_Halo and say sleep is the answer.

*~Meredith~*

It's so obvious
That the promise
Keeps me here
Painting pictures where
All the colors
Disappear
*Lit

Jacman
Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291
Dwight Il, US
6 posted 2000-07-11 02:10 PM


Nice touch on this one.  I would have to say... vikadin.  Just kidding, how about sunlight?  It's a tough one.

jason

TearsOfPearls
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since 1999-09-23
Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa
7 posted 2000-07-11 02:56 PM


Great poem, nice idea to write a riddle into a poem.

I also think it is sleeping...how long are you going to keep us in suspence...tell us the answer!!


Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach.

amazon_lover
Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491
Dublin,Ireland
8 posted 2000-07-11 03:05 PM


nice riddle may be a dream or a nightmare...but to grow old...so whats the answer ,,,????0000

Martini
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 308
Toronto, Ontario, Canada
9 posted 2000-07-11 04:11 PM


I loved it...

my gues is going to be the answer is love

BabyGirl1
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since 2000-07-02
Posts 91
Morris, IL
10 posted 2000-07-11 04:44 PM


Great riddle!  My answer would also have to be sleep.

"We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can fly only by embracing each other."

-Luciano de Crescenzo-

Crystalina123
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since 2000-01-31
Posts 228

11 posted 2000-07-11 04:49 PM


I'm guessing sleep . . . that seems to be the obvious answer but hten again when have you ever been obvious"   Cute idea though!!!


Love,
Crystal

When a door closes, another door of oppurtunity opens. The only problem is that most of us are so busy looking at the closed door that we fail to see

BabyGirl1
Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 91
Morris, IL
12 posted 2000-07-11 04:55 PM


Sorry, hit the button twice! Ooops!


[This message has been edited by BabyGirl1 (edited 07-12-2000).]

cutie2005
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 148
Bennett, Colorado USA
13 posted 2000-07-11 09:37 PM


That was really nice!! I don't know what the answer is, i first thought sleep and i saw other people say that too, So i will have to go with that one!!! If not that then Love was a good answer!
Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
14 posted 2000-07-12 06:35 AM


Great idea, and nicely done!  I'm with the majority above ... is it "sleep"???

Best wishes,
/Kit

Acies
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Twilight Zone
15 posted 2000-07-12 12:04 PM


its gotta be sleep.  what is it?
CLBinLOVE
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 147
Hilton Head, SC, USA
16 posted 2000-07-12 12:55 PM


hi guys
wow, 15 responses! the most ive ever gotten before this is like 5!
anyway, i think its interesting to see what people think the awnser to this riddle is, so im not gonna post the awnser on here...
what i have done is emailed about the first 12 people telling them the awnser, but that got kinda repettive, so after you post a guess, email me and ill send you the awnser.
thx everybody for all the replies!!
CLBinLOVE

always follow your heart, never follow others unless it is truely where you want to go, and never give up a dream, maybe just set it aside for a while... :)

Snickers
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since 2000-05-25
Posts 88
East Haddam, CT
17 posted 2000-07-12 02:01 PM


This iz very clever and I applaud u on writing it.  Awesome work!! As for the answer, "sleep" seems too obvious, although it looks like it would fit.  I know I'm probably very wrong, but what about "time" or "writing"?? I'm anxious to find out.  

~<3 Alwayz~
  **Nikki**


~*~*~*~*"We can complain because roses have thorns, or we can rejoice because thorns have roses." *~*~*~*~

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
18 posted 2007-12-01 11:01 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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