Teen Poetry #3 |
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Desparation |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA ![]() |
Walking down this dark corridor Sweat clings to the bottom of my palms As I run them against these damp walls Attempting in vain to rid these vicisous calls Echoing from the depths of my soul Blood trickles from long forgotten scars Healed over in time, yet gashed open once again Each time the shadows mention his name I want to find my light at the end of this torturious tunnel No longer do I want to run aimlessly alone and cold in the dark I want to run to the pulsating warmth found in this unknown creature that stands before me And feel it's skin beneath my finger tips That would surely purge my soul from ill forgotten tainted bliss Yet I can not seem to reach it It's twisting me down a spiral of vain attempts Wanting and needing to be near the light Cooling and burning my skin with unaqquitted desires Embraced by hopelessness I stare At something that has always been there Not being able to touch, nor hold Something always holding me back Always keeping me on this same track... |
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buttercup411 Junior Member
since 2000-07-03
Posts 41miami, fl, u.s |
hey welcome to passions .....that's a reall good poem......you write very well i must say.. ![]() keep your head up love, butter |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions Ceinwyn! Such a dark and mysterious first post; Hope to read more from you! Check your e-mail for a special message ![]() Best wishes, /Kit |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Welcome, excellent visual and physical stimulations through your very eloquent writing. Hope you like it here. You've definitely got my attention and I'm waiting for more. jason ![]() |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Welcome to Passions! I loved your first piece can't wait to read more. I hope you enjoy it here. Keep your head up always. Keep up the good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "Always do your best, you will always succeed" |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Hey kid...You started reading me this poem, but I don't think you had it finished then. As always, I adore it. I so incredibly, sincerely hope you find all your looking for. I know you will, but I hope the wait is not too long. Just get out there and grab that perfect bull by the horns and be cool...see ya in August. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
welcome to passions!!!i hope that you enjoy it here as much as i do...this was a beautiful first post...keep up the good work...i really hope to read more by you... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
Very good visual images. I truly felt as if I were there running down that corridor with you. Good job. Love, Crystal Maybe God has us meet a few wrong people so that when we meet the right one we can truly appreciate the gift. |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
Very well writen. I hope you write many more like this one in the future. |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Definitely made an impact with your first post, letting us all know that you belong here. I like your style and I like your descriptiveness. You paint a very vivid picture. Can't wait to see more. Thomas "I could have missed the pain But I'd of had to miss The Dance" -Garth Brooks- |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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