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death of a flower
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death of a flower |
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April Resi Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 119Alabama |
Sweet, innocent petals Soft and pure against my lips Sweet, inticing scent drifts through the air Soaring gently through the mist Plucked from home, changed forever Never innocent again Tainted by my touch Youth falls through your fingers like sand I'm so sorry and heartbroken I try to give it back, make it right It's too late now my flower Forever changed forever that night. |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
I'm not really sure how to reply to this poem. It creates a very suggestive idea. I hope thats not just me, and I'm not reading to much into it. But it is very well written, and thus far, I must say it is my favorite from you. I also must say thank you for all of your kind replies. You'll never know how much they really do lift me up. jason |
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sorrowfulangel Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 59Memphis,TN |
i must say i really do like this poem....when you lose something,no matter how bad you want it back,sometimes it just doesn't return....try to see the good in it..and then you'll relize it wasn't lost with no hope "god is the biggest under-achiever I know,something good happens god is great,something bad happens,he now works in mysterious ways" |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
I think I know what you did...hehehe...This truly is an excellent poem. Visual depcitions and analogies were great. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
I really enjoyed reading this. I hope that you keep it up. Good luck with the rest of your work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "Always do your best, you will always succeed" |
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April Resi Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 119Alabama |
No one read too much into this one. I actually did kinda write it about a flower, but also about a loss of innocence. I had picked a flower for it's smell earlier and my touch had caused the petals to wilt. It made me think of how a tiny little touch can change so much.... and I started writing. I actually typed it from the top of my head write onto here. That's why the rhythm could probably use some touch-ups. If you have any suggestions, feel free to let me know, I'm open! I just wanted to let you all know that you don't have a dirty mind, that was what it was suppose to make you think! Thank you for the wonderful compliments!!!!!! April |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
Your poem is great, it does not need to be touched up. I enjoyed it just like that. It's an incredible tallent you have to be able to write poetry off the top of your head. |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
Your poem is great, it does not need to be touched up. I enjoyed it just like that. It's an incredible tallent you have to be able to write poetry off the top of your head. |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
Your poem is great, it does not need to be touched up. I enjoyed it just like that. It's an incredible tallent you have to be able to write poetry off the top of your head. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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