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Shades of Humanity |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina 
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*This is a re-post from Teen Poetry # 2, but I'm getting it published, so I wanted to see what y'all think. Thanks!* Blue was the ocean As she crashed on the shore Blue were her waves Lapping on the moore Blue was the world Coming in with her tide But black was the one Who had long ago died Red was the sun As she dropped in the west Red were her rays Spilling forth from her breast Red was the world All ablaze in her light But black was the one Who awaited the night Gold were her eyes As she captured his trust Gold were her words Causing anger, pain, lust Gold was her world Only fools' gold, and yet Black is the one Who will never forget Blue is your faith May it never expire Red is your heart May it quench your desire Gold is your life Be it truth or charade But black is your sin Who have you betrayed? I am none but the angel Who sings you to sleep As you pray to God Your soul to keep *Me |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
This is an awesome piece. I can see why it should be published. This is the best example of metaphore I've seen yet. This is great, now I'm going to go and read all of your stuff. jason |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Lf~this was so beautiful! I'm so astonished by your words that I'm at a loss for them!! You are a very talented writer and deserve the publishment! (if that's even a word!) you have such a way with words~now I'm all inspired!  hehe anyways, wonderful piece! Keep it up!Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~My fire is dead,it knew no pain; yet it is dead and I remain: All stiff with ice ashes lie;and they are dead, and I will die~*~ |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
My thanks to both of you. I love poetry sooo much! I really love reading what everyone has written, and I love hearing what everyone thinks about my stuff. Thank you all for your support! *~Meredith~* I am none but the angel Who sings you to sleep As you pray to God Your soul to keep *Me |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Very beautiful Meredith! The flow in this is just lovely ... well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
All of your work astonishes me. I have this poetry book, and I hope you don't mind, but I got "Through God's eyes" in there. This poem is amazing and you definately deserve publishing. Keep up the good writing. Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach. |
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Linzi Junior Member
since 2000-07-08
Posts 35Pennsylvania, USA |
Wow! That's absolutely amazing! I love every bit of it! Especially the last stanza and how it ties everything together...It's just breath taking! I agree, It definitely deserves publishing!!! ~*~Linzi~*~ "Ignore reality; there's nothing you can do about it" ~ Natalie Imbruglia |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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