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The River
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The River |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
The river flows as it may Slowly to the sea Travelling in it's currents The lives of you and me Each eddy and rock over which we flow Is a trial we must overcome And when the river opens wide Sometimes we come undone We brush the banks taking along A piece of all we touch And when another stream connects It matters to us much Each tree that touches the life we give Blossoms full and free Fed from the waters that we are Like honey to a bee The spring from which the river flows The humbleness of our birth And the point it lets out to sea The end of our time on earth Rushing steadily towards the deep Sometimes we move so fast While other times we're almost still Caressing all that crosses our path Sometimes we guide a weary soul Set upon us in a boat When it gives up and wishes to sink We keep it's dreams a float Alas, we all are rivers Springing forth each day Sometimes lost ourselves Sometimes showing others the way Thomas |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Hey, this is excellent. This is such an accurate simile of how are lives compare to a river. It shows that maybe we are connected with nature more deeply than we think. jason |
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skachik New Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 5Houston area, TX, USA |
wow! you are really talented! you definately have my vote. you have a great imagination. keep up the good work. ~*~ And among these abide faith, hope, and love; but the greatest of these is love. I Corinthians 13:13 ~*~ |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Hey there, I loved the images in the poem. Keep up the good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
This is a beautiful poem, and it touched me. You have opened my eyes to a few things I forgot. It is so tru your poem. My favourite part: Alas, we all are rivers Sringing forth each day Sometimes lost ourselves Sometimes showing others the way Wonderful poem, keep on writing. Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach. |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I love this piece! You speak with such beauty and truth. I think that this would make a wonderful addition to the book.  "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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BabyGirl1 Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 91Morris, IL |
Love it, as always! When I read this poem, I think of our lives together. Together, we are the river. Everything we touch has an affect on us, but we never stop flowing together. Love always, BabyGirl1 |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
I know this has nothing to do with your poem, but I suddenly started wondering something when I read Kristal's reply...I wonder if the way I write and the whole feel of my words will change when someday my river has joined with another... "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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FlipAngel Junior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 46Prior Lake, MN, USA |
Wow, what a wonderfully written poem! You definitely got my vote...this piece is beautiful. ~*Yesterday is gone, let go of the past; tommorrow will bring new hope to grasp*~ |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
I must agree Thomas, this one is excellent~Nice personification and beautifully worded! I love all your work and you seem to be racking my votes!! Keep it up! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~My fire is dead,it knew no pain; yet it is dead and I remain: All stiff with ice ashes lie;and they are dead, and I will die~*~ |
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Linzi Junior Member
since 2000-07-08
Posts 35Pennsylvania, USA |
I agree. An excellent poem with great imagery, and wonderful comparisons! I love it! ~*~Linzi~*~ |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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