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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A 
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All I See Slouching deeply into a transe, my aching mind is still. In this park, I find some peace from my life until I gaze across the swings and slide and wish I hadn't seen that child standing with a ball and eyes so full of dreams. Sad it seems, or just to me that never can I see a little boy or little girl and not fear what will be. My eyes set deep, my heart then bleeds and tares their dreams apart in my mind because I know they can't see quite this far. Inevitabilty yeilds for none. I've lived it's loveless game. All I see inside this child is years more of the same. Too much life to cloud my mind with pity for the young. He stands so small and belts aloud the song I once had sung. Jeremy D. Halstead 7-7-00 [This message has been edited by Jeremy Halstead (edited 07-07-2000).] |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
How I long still for the innocence of youth. When we were all carefree and oblivious to the truth. Life is a hard road we all must travel. I think if we could all get a little of that youthful innocence back, we would see things in a different light. Once again I stand in awe of your gift. Thomas |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Jeremy, I loved it. This poem was very deep. Well keep it up. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "Always do your best, you will always succeed" |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
oh Jeremy, we all yearn for the innocence of childhood. well my dear just keep your head up you'll do just fine!! Wonderful poem, you've got my vote! Love Always~*~Jess~*~ ~*~My fire is dead,it knew no pain; yet it is dead and I remain: All stiff with ice ashes lie;and they are dead, and I will die~*~ |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Oh, this poem is so sad. I know what it's like to feel for the things that we all know children will have to go through, but maybe they'll come through it better than we did... wonderful writing, my friend. < !signature--> "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea [This message has been edited by LoveBug (edited 07-08-2000).] |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Jer, I remember us talking about this the other day. You wrote this better than I could ever have thought possible. I many times wish that I didn't know many of the things in life that I know now. For as you've said in the past,"ignorance is bliss." once again you've got my vote. jason |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
Another excellent poem Jeremy! Every new poem amazes me even more than the previous. This poem is sad, but it made me realize, and I don't know how, if you stop dreaming, you're dead...but sometimes...you take that dream to far, and you can't face reality anymore, and this feeling I know oh so well. Keep up the good stuff  Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent writing Jeremy! You images were vivid as you sat on the bench and contemplated the innocense of childhood bliss. Beautifully written! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Wicced_Witch Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 110Clarksville, TN, USA |
Jeremy, I loved this poem. I reminds me of how much I miss being a little kid. Life seemed alot easier back then and sometimes I would give anything to go back. Keep up the good work, you got my vote. Stephanie |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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