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It's so COLD out here alone
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It's so COLD out here alone |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
Picture yourself here, live this poem as you read it, i know many of you have already. Cold and Alone I sit alone in a familar place It's not too cold, though i brought you just in case The river sits there cold and still I'm not sure why i'm sitting here but i soon will I pull out a picture, the one i have of you I stare at it intently wondering again of the past What might have been comes to mind again These thoughts dawn my mind like before I freeze on the surface but the inside i'm not sure Your face so delicate and soft Still I grasp the piture alone, now in the dark It's so cold in the dark, where are you? I need you and your no where to be found I put my head in my hands, the cold goes so deep I'm lost in thought, even to lost to weep I stare at the dark image that was in my hands I wonder of past and present yet still uknown Why do i sit here so cold and alone? ---Written by:Hoppy 9-14-99 There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line. -- Oscar Levant "Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live." |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
I like this poem a lot. Who is it about? I like how you take on the qualities of the river in your poem. |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
I do hope you are no longer alone and that you made it through this lonely time. Beautiful poem. Very heartfelt. Loved it. Thomas |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Great writing hoppy! Very descriptive and full of emotion ... lovely sentiments! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
I did exactly what you said to do and found myself in a place to often have found myself. Thank you for the meloncholy nestolgic bliss. Very effective visuality. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
This is an emotion I am afraid of... regret. I hope you conquered your hopelessness, and have become stronger for it. Jenn [This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 07-08-2000).] |
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buttercup411 Junior Member
since 2000-07-03
Posts 41miami, fl, u.s |
that was a reall pretty piece.....love the way you made it sound, it reminds me of how i feel sometimes,..... .....love buttercup |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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