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Capoeira |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
This poem was inspired from two sources. 1st, my hobby, Capoeira (a Brasilian martial art/dance) 2nd, the movie Syrano de Bourgerac, a French film in which Syrano, makes a poem while in a sword duel, and and wins in the end, as the poem predicts. it's hastily writen but try to enjoy it CAPOEIRA: I am champion of the roda… king of the circle I see you coming into the roda, jut to chalenge me. You're swift and muscular, with short dreadlocks. You're also more athletic than me. We cross ourselves, and touch the floor. We then shake hands, and prepare to rumble. The cheer goes up from the witnesses, from the roda The drums start to play, can u feel the syncopation? You cartwheel to the right, You start your ginga I cartwheel to the left, and I begin mine. You aproach me, You think you can peer into my soul. < < < < I can hear the chrorus screaming, anxous for a winner The birimbau plays furiously now The crowd grows ever more ovservant. You come in for another assault, to finish what you began You, as you dodge, one of my kicks, work your way into a handstand. < You fall to the pavement You make a loud thud, and our bout is over I am champion of the roda I am king of the circle. Max |
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Barelybreathing Junior Member
since 2000-04-26
Posts 46 |
A great poem. Nice flow of words and rythm.I could almost imagine the scene happening in front me. Keep on writing. ~sami~ 'The greatest thing in the world is to know how to be one's own.' ~Montaigne~ |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
This poem was very interesting. I liked the images that I could picture. Keep up the good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "Always do your best, you will always succeed" |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Wow.. I love this poem. I love the imagery and how you tell the story of what will-power can do aganst stronger opponents. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
I brought this back from the dead becuase I wanted to get people's response to this question: Does this count as Prose? |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Jose~~~Why dont you post it in Prose and see what they say about it???I think it would go there too... ~*YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS*~ |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
I have no idea if this counts as a prose, you might as well most it there anyway. It's a great poem though...I must have missed it somehow.  Hasta LuegoBel Beautiful is empty Beautiful is free Beautiful loves no one Beautiful stripped me -"Beautiful" CREED |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
since there are rules against double-posting, could one of the moderators please move this into the prose forum |
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Ender Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 200Yuma, AZ USA |
that was a really good poem. it had a lot of meaning and expressed a lot of emotion. excellent poem! *Blonde people are normal. Everyone else is just strange. -Ender* |
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