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The Rain |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A 
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The Rain A shining sun or maybe not still is glowing pain. Seeing shadows on the side. Standing in the rain. No lightning, no thunder, no moonlight to see the damp. Any sort of spark be great... where's my moonlit lamp? Pooring down with tastes of salt but not to quench your thirst. Just to bring the taste of rain until the puddles burst. Again, I'm wet, but find no rainbows as dryness has been slain. Standing lone and insecure. Living in rain. "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." [This message has been edited by Jeremy Halstead (edited 07-06-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You have a wonderful talent Jeremy! This flowed so sweetly ... beautifully written and so descriptive! Really well done indeed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Jeremy, I liked this poem. It was very descriptive and flowed nicely. I hope you keep this up. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
What graceful rhymes! I like this poem alot. |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Jeremy, you never cease to amaze me. This poem spoke volumes. I think alot of us need to step in out of the rain. The descriptiveness and naturalistic beauty embelished here is wonderful. I'm on the edge of my seat waiting for more. TAP2 |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Well Jeremy, this is probably one of the best I've seen from you so far. Even though I love the rain. Your getting alot better at physical sensation and description. Not that you were bad in the first place, but this poem does an exceptionally good job at putting a certain picture in my mind. And isn't Tom such a suck up? |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
This is a lovely poem, as all of your previous work. You have a great talent and you use it in a spectacular way. I live in the rain. Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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