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hoppy
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since 2000-01-27

Posts 271

0 posted 2000-07-06 02:28 AM

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You walked through the valley of hidden trees
Gracing through shadows soft as the breeze;
Your dance charmed the creatures and pleased the man,
Hold out your hand and allow the dove to land,
It wishes to know from where it came
Except you and the dove, the world is to blame.
A rainbow falls from a cloud through the sky
A voice bellowed from above saying she will die
He had sent her so i had no control
I just wished she didn't have to go
I could only watch when she fell to the ground.
She then departed and I heard a voice soft in tone
Before me I saw the tree for a moment
Then what i couldn't see was gone
---Written by:Hoppy

11-27-99

There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line.
-- Oscar Levant

"Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live."

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

1 posted 2000-07-06 05:23 AM

This is the first of your's I've read and I'm quite impressed. You have a certain style that I'm attracted to. Keep it up.

Jeremy

"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2000-07-06 07:45 AM

This had a lovely flow hoppy, and so picturesque ... keep up the great writing!

Best wishes,
/Kit

TearsOfPearls
Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa

3 posted 2000-07-06 03:48 PM

Great poem, I have always liked your work. It's like reading something, but reading nothing, it means something and yet nothing, hope you know what I mean.

Wonderful poem.

Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach.

hoppy
Member

since 2000-01-27

Posts 271

4 posted 2000-07-06 04:42 PM

Thank for the replies everyone, Tearsofperals: i think i know what you mean,

There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line.
-- Oscar Levant

"Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live."

BabyGirl1
Member

since 2000-07-02

Posts 91
Morris, IL

5 posted 2000-07-06 10:02 PM

Beautiful poem hoppy. It flows so nicely and creates such a vivid image in your head. I really enjoyed it and can't wait to read more

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

6 posted 2007-12-01 10:36 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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