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While going to the Q-mart
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While going to the Q-mart |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
I wrote this as a rap. about 110 bpm each line is about 1/2 a measure: WHILE GOING TO THE Q-MART: My morning starts As I roll outta bed Mom said to buy some milk And hunger's in my head I throw on some ragged shorts 'Cause It's gettin hot these days On the way I encounter A soul piercing gaze. But what have I done? Have I committed some sin? I look down at my legs and only see my brown skin. Then from his car emerges, A white version of me. My same tattered rags, Same messed up hair… Then I think to myself, < How can this be > < All he gets is warm smiles > < So what's the difference > < between him and me! > An old woman passes him She greets him "hello" Her expression changed As she passes me As if to say "oh no" So, come on tell me What the cause of this Is this all really Just because I'm Spanish? |
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sorrowfulangel Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 59Memphis,TN |
i like your poem jose,i've never really though of it that way.if people are so narrow minded as to think that way,then I don't think their company would be any better. "god is the biggest under-achiever I know,something good happens god is great,something bad happens,he now works in mysterious ways" |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Great writing Josi! Some days, I too wish I could see into people's minds for answers. All we can do is smile, and realize it's their loss if they don't take the time to get to know us. Wonderful writing! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Jose- Great poem. I'm sure a lot of people feel the same way you do. People can be so horribly narrow-minded. If they don't accept you without getting to know you, they aren't worth your time. Keep up your writing Bel |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Hey, I liked this one too. I think that if people judge others on appearance, and don't get to know someone than they aren't worthy of your friendship. I am glad to be your friend. Luv always, Michelle "True friends stab you in the front" |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
this is good jose...but you see im from chicago and its like you see that stuff everyday...its just like one big race war out there...you cant talk to this one because hes mexican but then you cant talk to her cuz shes white and you cant talk to this one cuz hes black...i see it all the time...its like they dont cross the streets into another "colors" neighborhood... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
well this is a great poem i really like it as for the point. i do feel this way at all its just how i guess i look at the world. i don't see colors i see personality that i don't like. well enjoyed it and do keep it up. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
Thanks for reading my poem. It felt good to get this kind of thought off of my mind. I think that if enough people speak out, even negitivly, if we open dialogue, race will no loger be an issue in our society. In my country, slavery wasn't abolished until 1898, but race relations have made a lot more progress than here, and today, it is no longer an issue there. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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