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BabyGirl1 Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 91Morris, IL |
Each moment that we spen on earth Is monitored by time We never stop to think about The love that we may find We see others hand in hand As we still walk alone Oblivious that what we need Is a love to call our own This poem just doesn't seem finished to me, but I can't think of anything else to add. If any of you have any suggestions, they would be very helpful. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
you may not have finished the poem...but the way you started it was really good...and hopefully people will help you to make it perfect... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
This'll be up here for a couple more days, so I've got plenty of time to add to it....although the promptness of it isn't without is virtues. Give Lexi a kiss for me. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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